On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals.
The author's claims in the statement that increase in the number of moped accidents are attributed to the number of the mopeds being rented by the rental company, hence suggesting a remedy that the number of accidents can be reduced by reducing the rental count. Though the statement which the author is making seems sufficing enough for the cause, it is not foolproof. There are enough loopholes in the statement which would break the myth of the author.
Firstly, the author suggests limiting the number of mopeds rented from 50 to 25 per rental company. This would very well ensure that the number of mopeds being used on the island would be reduced by half, provided that the number of rental companies remains the same. Why would a rental company which used to earn X dollars a day, want to reduce the income to 0.5X dollars a day? They would definitely find a way out to maintain their income. They might open multiple branches of the rental company in different regions of the island, say he opens 3 branches, he would now be having a limit of renting 75 mopes a day. Now, who is the winner? Balmer Island Town Council or the Rental Company?
Secondly and most importantly, the author attributed the number of accidents to moped count. Is it a wise thing to correlate accidents and vehicular count? Let's say, 100 people who are good at driving and follow the traffic rules, would lead to lesser accidents than 50 people who are not good drivers. There are more important and crucial factors to an accident then just vehicular count. Drunk and irresponsible drivers, bad roads are a few notable factors. So does a reduction in the vehicular count by half and not making any amendments to the other crucial reasons for accidents help in reduction accident count?
The author mentions that similar steps were taken by Seavilles Town Council and that they have achieved the result. What does similar mean here? They would surely have reduced the rental count as the author claims. But are we aware of the other amendments they would have made to traffic rules or road safety rules? The amalgamated effort of all the changes would have helped reduce the number of accidents. Hence Balmer council might not obtain the expected result if they mask the other amendments made and stay stubborn in implementation of just vehicular count reduction.
Most importantly, it is mentioned that mopeds are the most popular means of transportation. If the vehicular count is reduced by half, how would the council handle the transportation needs of all the tourists? It might create dissatisfaction in the tourists and lead to the downfall in tourism in Blamer Islands.
It seems definite that the author aims at a constructive way to reduce accidents. But the assumptions made by the author to reduce the accident count are not self-sustainable. To obtain the desired results he would have to work on numerous other factors which would help achieve the result. But in the current form, it is not convincing enough if these remedies would help achieve the result.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 29 15
No. of Words: 524 350
No. of Characters: 2482 1500
No. of Different Words: 221 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.784 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.737 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.51 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 183 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.069 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.477 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.379 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.286 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.5 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.103 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 13, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'claim'.
Suggestion: claim
The authors claims in the statement that increase in the n...
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Line 5, column 157, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...orrelate accidents and vehicular count? Lets say, 100 people who are good at driving...
^^^^
Line 7, column 409, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... helped reduce the number of accidents. Hence Balmer council might not obtain the exp...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, then, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2539.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 523.0 441.139720559 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85468451243 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57550097152 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443594646272 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 769.5 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.6024709837 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.5517241379 119.503703932 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0344827586 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.20689655172 5.70786347227 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200465329906 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566063729444 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672558751693 0.0701772020484 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103872753314 0.128457276422 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441664995462 0.0628817314937 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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