"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the letter to the Balmer Island Gazette it is recommended that the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians will be reduced if the town council of Balmer Island limit the number of mopeds rented by the island’s rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day. The recommendation is based on the reduction in moped accidents noted in the neighboring island of Seaville last year. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated three questions must be answered.
First of all, will the annual number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians will be reduced by only limiting moped rental during summer months? In other words, are most accidents occur only during summer months and that negligible number of accidents occur during other months? It is possible that there are accidents that happen during rainy season due to water on the road or during winters with snow or black ice on the road. Further, there is a possibility that most of the accidents occur in season other than summer. If either of these scenarios has merits, then the conclusion drawn in the original argument is significantly weakened.
Secondly, is number of mopeds on the road the only reason for accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians? Perhaps, there are no footpaths constructed in Balmer Island and because of which pedestrians are walking on the road and leading to the increase in accidents. It may well be possible that there are no crosswalk signals on the island for pedestrians to cross the streets and pedestrians are forced to cross the streets with the flowing traffic and due which the number of accidents are more. If above is true, then the argument does not hold water.
Lastly, are Balmer Island and Seaville island the same? i.e. what worked for Seaville same would work exactly for Balmer Island? It may be possible that the population of Seaville Island is way less compared to population of Balmer Island as a result even by reducing the number of moped rented per day may also not fetch similar result as achieved in Seaville. Also, it could be possible that Seaville has better roads for mopeds and better walkways for pedestrians and Balmer Island lack on these infrastructures. If any of the scenario holds true, then the conclusion drawn in the original argument will not hold good.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands now is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If author is able to answer the questions above and offer more evidence, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 436 350
No. of Characters: 2133 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.57 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.892 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.658 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.02 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.334 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.564 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2185.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 436.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01146788991 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7435372944 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.43119266055 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 675.9 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8448588971 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9473684211 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78947368421 5.70786347227 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329185899218 0.218282227539 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10650295037 0.0743258471296 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0987446767309 0.0701772020484 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177229267035 0.128457276422 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0988890349114 0.0628817314937 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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