The city council of Town X has proposed reducing the city’s electric expenses by switching all the lights in public buildings from incandescent bulbs to light-emitting diodes (LEDs). The switch would be made gradually as the old incandescent bulbs burn out, and the city council reasons that since LED lights burn brighter and cost no more to purchase, the switch would help Town X save money on electrical costs in the future.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to help evaluate the efficacy of the city council’s proposal to save money on electrical costs. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the council’s prediction.
The city council proposed of reducing the city's electric expenses by switching all the lights in public buildings from incandescent bulbs to light-emitting diodes and the switch would be made gradually as the old incandescent bulbs burn out .They bolstered their proposal by citing that LED lights burn brighter than incandescent bulbs and cost no more to purchase .Thus the switch would help Town X save money in electrical costs in future . The proposal is unconvincing since it some important questions have been left unanswered .The same seriously undermines the credibility and invalidates the merit of the proposal.
The first and foremost question that need to be answered on the lack of more data provided on the LED by the city council . City council in their proposal did not give sufficient data on why LED lights are better than incandescent bulbs ? Information like time duration of LED ,electricity consumption etc would have been given by them to further bolstered their proposal for example it might be possible that time duration of LED lights are less than that of the incandescent bulbs then it would increase the cost as LED lights need to be changed frequently. More data should have been provided by the city council to strengthen their proposal.
Additionally we need answer to the question based on lack of data on electricity consumption of the city . City council solely focused on the incandescent bulbs and ignored many others factors which would have been taken into consideration in order to save electrical costs in future. Factors like usage of other appliances such as industrial appliances , home appliances and office appliances .For example it might be possible that people of Town X used air conditioners frequently which greatly increases the electrical cost , it might also be possible that Town X might be a hub of industries which uses appliances of heavy electricity consumption. Data on other factors should have been taken into consideration by the city council.
Further, answers to the question based on whether LED lights can be directly replaceable or not . It should have mentioned in the proposal that whether the LED light will require new fixtures or can be replaced directly and fixed into old ones . As it can increase the budget of the project with a heavy workload which can be not so good idea focusing on the electrical costs reduction.
Therefore by failing to answer critical questions like the ones mentioned above the proposal exposes its inherent fallacies. To fully understand the merit of above proposal one needs cogent answers to the questions posed above , since the proposal fails to deliver on this count we reject it in totality.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 443 350
No. of Characters: 2222 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.588 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.016 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.762 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.533 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.875 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.379 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.632 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.136 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2261.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 443.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10383747178 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82314321954 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446952595937 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 701.1 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 105.728877586 57.8364921388 183% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.733333333 119.503703932 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5333333333 23.324526521 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 27.0 5.25449101796 514% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.477757567433 0.218282227539 219% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151621827713 0.0743258471296 204% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.187537473815 0.0701772020484 267% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263848277171 0.128457276422 205% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.232033556403 0.0628817314937 369% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 14.3799401198 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 30.5 12.3882235529 246% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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