A folk remedy for insomnia, the scent in lavender flowers, has now been proved effective. In a recent study, 30 volunteers with chronic insomnia slept each night for three weeks on lavender-scented pillows in a controlled room where their sleep was monitored. During the first week, volunteers continued to take their usual sleeping medication. They slept soundly but wakened feeling tired. During the second week, the volunteers discontinued their medication. As a result, they slept less soundly than the previous week and felt even more tired. During the third week, the volunteers slept longer and more soundly than in the previous two weeks. This shows that over a short period of time lavender cures insomnia.
The argument explains about the people who slept in a pillow with lavender scent cured from insomnia. The author relies on a short experiment that has been done for three weeks, which shows the volunteers were have a sleep discomfort,but as time passed, they had a good sleep. The author correlate the results of a good sleep in favor of the lavander scent. This argument is rife with holes and unwarranted assumptions, as there are several queations and missing information the author should firstly answer them.
First, as the argument mentioned that people were suffer from isomnia and after using the scent of the lavander in their pillows; they could sleep well. The author overlooked to cite how was their sleep before and how many hours they used to sleep per day?
There are many factors could be the reason for their sleepl goodness, and the author should expalin all the experimental conditions. For example, during the experiment, how was the envirnoment in the room it is dark or has a light? Propably the patient used to sleep in a dark and during the first two weeks they were sleep in a light lamp, but in the last week they slept in a dark. Moreover, when they slept? Which time in a day? is it during noon or afternoon or evening? All these factors don’t metion in the argument, which definitly affect the quality of sleep. Thus, within the missed information and missed all the exprimental conditions, the argument as it showed is significantly weakened.
Further, there is a crucial factor could be the reason for the good sleep in the third days, which is the circadian rhythm. People in usual accutomed to sleep in regural pattern which causes the quality of their comfort during the sleep. For example, if someone used to sleep in 6 pm every day, during this time the melatonin ( sleep hormon ) releases and helps the indivdual to sleep good. However, if this time changed and became sleep at 10 pm, the sleep hormon will not be there to make the quality of the one’s sleep. Thus, cast doubt in the results and the conclusio of the experiment, as they maybe in the first two weeks were trying to get familiar with the new time of sleep and their circadian rhythm doesn’t get in the regular pattern as usual. Therefore, the result of a longer sleep in the thrid week perhaps because of the volunteers’circadian rhythm became more well established during the new time of sleep. All the previous scenarios if are valid, they make this argument doesn’t hold water.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands above is considerably flawed. As the author depends on unwarranted assumptions. The author of this argument don’t mention crucial information about the experiment that has been done to illustarte whether the results correlate to the lavander’s scent or there are confounder factors which maybe the reason for the results.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 23 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 496 350
No. of Characters: 2295 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.719 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.627 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.403 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 146 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.565 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.338 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.609 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.424 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 211, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
... weeks, which shows the volunteers were have a sleep discomfort,but as time passed, ...
^^^^
Line 1, column 234, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , but
... volunteers were have a sleep discomfort,but as time passed, they had a good sleep. ...
^^^^
Line 1, column 278, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... as time passed, they had a good sleep. The author correlate the results of a good ...
^^^
Line 1, column 289, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'correlates'.
Suggestion: correlates
...ssed, they had a good sleep. The author correlate the results of a good sleep in favor of...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 43, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ere are many factors could be the reason for their sleepl goodness, and the autho...
^^
Line 3, column 433, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Is
..., when they slept? Which time in a day? is it during noon or afternoon or evening?...
^^
Line 3, column 702, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...as it showed is significantly weakened. Further, there is a crucial factor could...
^^^
Line 4, column 326, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...very day, during this time the melatonin sleep hormon releases and helps the ind...
^^
Line 4, column 340, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng this time the melatonin sleep hormon releases and helps the indivdual to slee...
^^
Line 6, column 72, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...it stands above is considerably flawed. As the author depends on unwarranted assum...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, third, thus, well, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2375.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 490.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84693877551 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62389065431 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430612244898 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 700.2 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0862431142 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9583333333 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4166666667 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.79166666667 5.70786347227 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201614384031 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610536651311 0.0743258471296 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539657254233 0.0701772020484 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123399301008 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520756764912 0.0628817314937 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 48.3550499002 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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