The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
“Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures.”
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Studying a culture is a great way to understand the people and their ways of life. It gives a lot of information on the differnt culture that we are unaware of. Many methods of studies have been developed by known anthropologist. However, Dr.Karp's agrument about inaccuracy of the methods of Dr. Field's understanding the tribes of Tertia in child rearing is not supported by the following evidence. Hence, I would like to question the validity of the argument.
Dr. Karp mentions Dr. Field's observational methods to be inaccurate. The time period of Dr. Filed's methods was done twenty years ago. It is a long time back in history and I would like to assume that people were more undeveloped during that time. The tribes of Tertia may be mostly living as a unit where they consider all the children to be as their own. Hence, the child reared by the whole village. As more modernisation came to the tribes of Tertia, the families separate and the families now take care of their own children. This could weaken Dr. Karp's argument.
The reason now that the tribes of Tertia raising their own children might be a result of continuous fights among the families. The intertribal fights might have divided the family and now the tribes take care of their own children. Dr. Karp doesnot have any data to contradict this fact in this argument. This doesnot weaken the methods used by Dr. Field.
Interviewing a great way to know more details of the people in island of Tertia. Interview is more of an organized way of knowing the information. the direction of the interview is lead by the questions asked in the interview. Maybe the graduate students asked the children of Tertia only questions about their biological parents and not the village rearing culture. Dr. Karp hasn't mentioned about the questions he used in his interview methods. Hence without the information, the validity of the argument is questionable.
Interviewing methods could be more established and would provide an accurate understanding on the child -rearing traditions of Tertia and other islands. More focus on the right questions and understanding changes among the tribes may give a better assessment. Hence I would ask the committee to have more data available before making a decision.
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Discourse Markers used:
['hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.304136253041 0.25644967241 119% => OK
Verbs: 0.141119221411 0.15541462614 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0851581508516 0.0836205057962 102% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0267639902676 0.0520304965353 51% => OK
Pronouns: 0.036496350365 0.0272364105082 134% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.124087591241 0.125424944231 99% => OK
Participles: 0.043795620438 0.0416121511921 105% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.77564980733 2.79052419416 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.021897810219 0.026700313972 82% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.136253041363 0.113004496875 121% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0243309002433 0.0255425247493 95% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00243309002433 0.0127820249294 19% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2268.0 2731.13054187 83% => OK
No of words: 381.0 446.07635468 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.95275590551 6.12365571057 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.57801047555 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.356955380577 0.378187486979 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.257217847769 0.287650121315 89% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.188976377953 0.208842608468 90% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.123359580052 0.135150697306 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77564980733 2.79052419416 99% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 207.018472906 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469816272966 0.469332199767 100% => OK
Word variations: 49.6638484791 52.1807786196 95% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.039408867 125% => OK
Sentence length: 15.24 23.2022227129 66% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8067310167 57.7814097925 57% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.72 141.986410481 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.24 23.2022227129 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.2 0.724660767414 28% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.58251231527 167% => OK
Readability: 40.9617847769 51.9672348444 79% => OK
Elegance: 2.30952380952 1.8405768891 125% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381880213993 0.441005458295 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.128136413486 0.135418324435 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.118026657521 0.0829849096947 142% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.530233445785 0.58762219726 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.156185423991 0.147661913831 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142877255659 0.193483328276 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554094198382 0.0970749176394 57% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.472672025862 0.42659136922 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0707618033286 0.0774707102158 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254547513387 0.312017818177 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560256749426 0.0698173142475 80% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.33743842365 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.82512315271 249% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.82389162562 248% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 14.657635468 116% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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More arguments wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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