The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
"Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
doctor karp has written the article highlighting difference he found in results of his research on tersia’s children and that of doctor field’s, based on which he has claimed dr. fields results were incorrect. moreover, taking this a base, dr. karp has rejected the methodology undertaken by dr. field and has claimed his as superior. however, the argument is not cogent enough and is rife hole and assumption.
Firstly, it must be noticed dr. field. conducted the research two decades earlier. dr. field had stated the entire village was involved in upbringing of the children, whereas dr. karp has concluded only parents have been found undertaking the task. dr. karp interviewed the children and observed they talked about their parents only and consequently, felt if other villagers had that level of significance in their life, they would be discussed during the conversation. however, some points in this claim are not firm. First, it has not been stated anywhere the cultural practices of tersia are same as they were twenty years back. dr. karp has presumed that the same traditions have been preserved till date. His team has not taken interview of the people who might be children when dr. field went to visit the island. Second, we are not sure what were exact questions asked. since tersia is an exotic place, we are not sure if the connotation of words are same of for the residents as for other people. there might be gaps in what the children tried to convey and what the team perceived.
Secondly, dr. karp has concluded observation-based researched of dr. field was flawed and his interview-based method of acquiring data is better. Here, dr. karp taken one case, which seems weak in evaluation, as an example to debase an entire method. dr. karp should have stated some more, elaborated instance to strengthen his argument.
Thirdly, dr. karp is ascertain that his team, consisting of graduate students, will be able to assess the practice of child rearing in tersia and other islands effectively. this is statement has weaken his standing rather than backing it. it can be inferred that his team is still in process of deriving the results, therefore it is too early and unfair to conclude anything at this stage.
Even though there might be disagreements in dr. field’s theory and what has so far discovered by dr. karp’s team, but since the field work has not completed yet, it is too early to reach any decision. moreover, until all the aspects are considered, it is not appropriate idea to overrule any established procedure.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 430 350
No. of Characters: 2052 1500
No. of Different Words: 220 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.554 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.772 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.627 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 43 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.221 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.443 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.696 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.126 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, third, thirdly, whereas, as for
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2151.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 430.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0023255814 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76795480882 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53023255814 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 19.7664670659 152% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.8473053892 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.6181689747 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.7 119.503703932 60% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 14.3333333333 23.324526521 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 19.0 4.67664670659 406% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317825511953 0.218282227539 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769731557541 0.0743258471296 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530773002041 0.0701772020484 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175321958479 0.128457276422 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0725933968161 0.0628817314937 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 14.3799401198 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 48.3550499002 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.197005988 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 4.0 12.3882235529 32% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.1389221557 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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