The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
"Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The writer of this paper has made come points but fails to correlation his finding on a logical part in other to affirm that Dr. Field’s conclusion was wrong.
Firstly, the sample been evaluated by the writer is not as specific in nature as the observation taken by the Dr Field who dealt with an observation of Tertia as opposed to his interview of children living in the group islands that includes Tertia amongst other groups and so indicates interference by other population and perhaps these other groups where predominantly interviewed.
Additionally, the writer has made his conclusion on an interview carried out in which he fails to address with convincing information on the type of questions asked in the interview. For instance what if the interviewee were asked about questions that had to do with abandonment and negligence by the biological parents of the children.
Furthermore, it cannot be concluded that the the observation-centered studying approach is invalid as the interviews conclusion from from respondents (children) talking about their parents does not necessarily mean they are reared by their biological parent as their answers could have been on how they were not reared by their parents in any case.
Finally, the writer has made many assumption which could be valid if he had given more information of the characteristic of interviewee in term of their group and their age and other demographic concern to give a better perspective.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: the
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...urthermore, it cannot be concluded that the the observation-centered studying approach ...
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Suggestion: interviews'; interview's
...red studying approach is invalid as the interviews conclusion from from respondents childr...
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...is invalid as the interviews conclusion from from respondents children talking about thei...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'many assumptions'.
Suggestion: many assumptions
...ny case. Finally, the writer has made many assumption which could be valid if he had given mo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, for instance, talking about, in any case
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1240.0 2260.96107784 55% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 239.0 441.139720559 54% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18828451883 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93187294222 4.56307096286 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11443817483 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 204.123752495 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556485355649 0.468620217663 119% => OK
syllable_count: 378.9 705.55239521 54% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 22.8473053892 171% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.6957821379 57.8364921388 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 206.666666667 119.503703932 173% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.8333333333 23.324526521 171% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.1666666667 5.70786347227 266% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172252001765 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0765908339961 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576818518749 0.0701772020484 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0849155109481 0.128457276422 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604583239076 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.9 14.3799401198 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.89 48.3550499002 66% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.5 12.197005988 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.32208582834 112% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 98.500998004 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 11.1389221557 158% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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