The following appeared in a business magazine.
“As a result of numerous complaints of dizziness and nausea on the part of consumers of Promofoods tuna, the company requested that eight million cans of its tuna be returned for testing. Promofoods concluded that the canned tuna did not, after all, pose a health risk. This conclusion is based on tests performed on samples of the recalled cans by chemists from Promofoods; the chemists found that of the eight food chemicals most commonly blamed for causing symptoms of dizziness and nausea, five were not found in any of the tested cans. The chemists did find small amounts of the three remaining suspected chemicals but pointed out that these occur naturally in all canned foods."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be addressed in order to decide whether the conclusion and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to the questions would help to evaluate the conclusion.
The author argues that the canned tuna did not pose a health risk after the company requested that eight million cans of its tuna be returned for testing. Since the author believes that the chemists who test on samples of the recalled cans declare that five of eight food chemicals are not found in any of the tested cans. Also, those chemists point out that small amounts of the three remaining suspected chemicals occur naturally in all canned foods. However, there are several questions needed to ask in order to support the argument is reliable.
First of all, questions about the authority of chemists and the number of testing samples should be asked like, are those chemists reliable and how many cans are tested. The chemists should be professional and reliable for the public about the testing results, but the chemists here are from Promofoods. Therefore, they might lie in order to keep the reputation of the company, so the question about whether they are reliable is necessary. Besides, the question about the number of testing needed to be asked to support the argument since although there are eight million cans returned for testing and the chemists get the conclusion, how many tested cans is important to indicate credibility and representativeness.
In addition, are there other chemicals causing dizziness and nausea should be asked. The author demonstrates that five of eight food chemicals most commonly blamed for causing symptoms of dizziness and nausea were not found in any of the tested cans, and they declare that small amounts of the three remaining suspected chemicals occur naturally in all canned foods. However, it is significant to ask that do chemists find no other chemicals in canned tuna since there might be other chemicals that lead to dizziness and nausea, instead of these five chemicals. Moreover, in the declaration, three remaining suspected chemicals occur naturally in all canned foods, reliable could be another question to ask in order to make the argument reasonable.
Finally, how many cans of tuna are actually sold is another question worth asking and caring about. Even though the Promofoods company requested eight million cans of its tuna be returned for testing, the ratio of the number of cans sold and returned cans is crucial to support the argument, so knowing how many cans of tuna are actually sold in the market is useful. If there is plenty of amount of canned tuna is sold, eight million returned canned tuna might be insufficient for testing the exact situation of chemicals causing dizziness and nausea.
In general, questions including is the chemists reliable, how many samples does the chemist test, is there another chemical causing dizziness and nausea, and how many cans of tuna are actually sold, are significant to ask in order to prove that the argument, the canned tuna of Promofoods did not pose a health risk after testing, is reasonable.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 484 350
No. of Characters: 2388 1500
No. of Different Words: 154 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.69 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.934 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.488 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 175 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 135 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.336 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.812 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.418 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.633 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.153 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...not pose a health risk after the company requested that eight million cans of its...
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Line 1, column 157, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ns of its tuna be returned for testing. Since the author believes that the chemists w...
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Line 1, column 291, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...hat five of eight food chemicals are not found in any of the tested cans. Also, t...
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Line 1, column 390, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...oint out that small amounts of the three remaining suspected chemicals occur natu...
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...emists and the number of testing samples should be asked like, are those chemists...
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... results, but the chemists here are from Promofoods. Therefore, they might lie in...
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...ep the reputation of the company, so the question about whether they are reliable...
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...esides, the question about the number of testing needed to be asked to support th...
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...ce although there are eight million cans returned for testing and the chemists ge...
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...emicals most commonly blamed for causing symptoms of dizziness and nausea were no...
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... chemicals occur naturally in all canned foods, reliable could be another questio...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun amount seems to be countable; consider using: 'plenty of amounts'.
Suggestion: plenty of amounts
...ld in the market is useful. If there is plenty of amount of canned tuna is sold, eight million r...
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...d tuna might be insufficient for testing the exact situation of chemicals causing...
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...ument, the canned tuna of Promofoods did not pose a health risk after testing, is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, in addition, in general, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2447.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 484.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05578512397 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57561274103 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.351239669421 0.468620217663 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 755.1 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.408930613 57.8364921388 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.9375 119.503703932 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.25 23.324526521 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5625 5.70786347227 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308096791718 0.218282227539 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130825268212 0.0743258471296 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115455559875 0.0701772020484 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211752969651 0.128457276422 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.091937837311 0.0628817314937 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 14.3799401198 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.3550499002 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.66 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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