The following appeared in the business section of a newspaper.
"Given that the number of people in our country with some form of arthritis is expected to rise from 40 million to 60 million over the next twenty years, pharmaceutical companies that produce drugs for the treatment of arthritis should be very profitable. Many analysts believe that in ten years Becton Pharmaceuticals, which makes Xenon, the best-selling drug treatment for arthritis, will be the most profitable pharmaceutical company. But the patent on Xenon expires in three years, and other companies will then be able to produce a cheaper version of the drug. Thus, it is more likely that in ten years the most profitable pharmaceutical company will be Perkins Pharmaceuticals, maker of a new drug called Xylan, which clinical studies show is preferred over Xenon by seven out of ten patients suffering from the most extreme cases of arthritis."
In the business section of newspaper expected that number of people suffering from arthritis is rise in our country over the upcoming 20 years. Hence, author say that pharmaceutical companies that produce drugs for the treatment of arthritis should be very profitable. But this argument has many loopholes, which makes argument to weaken.
Author believed that during the time of ten years Becton Pharmaceutical company, which makes drugs “Xenon” and it is best-selling drug treatment for arthritis. But here author not concerned that there are many other drugs may be also coming in the market that also provide more efficiency compare to Xenon. So, this not advocate the author view that Becton Pharmaceutical company will be the most profitable company.
Because of the patent on Xenon expire in the next three years, the other company will try to illuminate the drugs and able to produce a cheaper version of the drugs. Therefore, in ten years the most profitable pharmaceutical company will be Perkins Pharmaceuticals. But here author not consider the case that Becton Pharmaceutical company after expiring patent on the Xenon drugs, they may be produce another drugs witch has high success ratio compare to any other previous drugs. And you should not have forgot that the product which more accurate is highly preferable than cheaper drugs. None of the any doctor prescribe to cheaper drugs, they always concerned that which is more helps to you. So, from that author directly not comes to the conclusion that because of expiring the patent on Xenon Perkins Pharmaceuticals company makes profit.
Author also say from clinical studies that Xylan is preferred over Xenon by seven out of ten patient suffering from the most extreme case of arthritis. Without any sufficient evidence and analysis, author directly not conclude this. Here author not provide any supporting evidence which directly concerned with this statement. And also in the argument predicted that number of people suffering from arthritis is increased. That should not directly conclude that profitable for pharmaceutical companies, because daily exercise and healthier food ratio of may decrease for suffering from case of arthritis.
Hence, Author lack of advocating evidence and insufficient study they come to the wrong argument. From that we see that article given on the newspaper is completely invalidate. Therefor before comes to any conclusion always consider all possible shortcomings.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 389 350
No. of Characters: 2043 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.441 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.252 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.708 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.45 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.881 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.335 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.498 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 506, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'forgotten'.
Suggestion: forgotten
...previous drugs. And you should not have forgot that the product which more accurate is...
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Line 8, column 166, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'invalidated'.
Suggestion: invalidated
...le given on the newspaper is completely invalidate. Therefor before comes to any conclusio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, may, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 13.6137724551 169% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2103.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 389.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40616966581 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83485672639 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447300771208 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.7396437774 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.15 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.45 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.8 5.70786347227 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148725924773 0.218282227539 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556426334046 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0836666636117 0.0701772020484 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0996856787268 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0868282715743 0.0628817314937 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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