The following appeared in a health magazine published in Corpora.
"Medical experts say that only one-quarter of Corpora's citizens meet the current standards for adequate physical fitness, even though twenty years ago, one-half of all of Corpora's citizens met the standards as then defined. But these experts are mistaken when they suggest that spending too much time using computers has caused a decline in fitness. Since overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of computer ownership are also highest, it is clear that using computers has not made citizens less physically fit. Instead, as shown by this year's unusually low expenditures on fitness-related products and services, the recent decline in the economy is most likely the cause, and fitness levels will improve when the economy does."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In the given article the medical experts explain the assumptions behind the decrease in the physical fitness of the people. They concluded that due to decrease in economic growth people spend less money on fitness products and services so, less economic growth less fitness level. There are hidden assumptions in the given article which shows the argument is based on unstated assumptions.
Moreover, the arguer compares the data of current year to the fitness data of twenty years ago. This comparison is not testified because twenty years is long time and in two decades the generations changed so much. For example, twenty years ago in India people don't know about western food and they ate Indian species only, but todays western food is famous in India. The atmosphere of India does not allow people to eat too cheese and bread, which increases fat make them lethargic. So, the arguer cannot say that in last twenty years the economic growth decreases because every country has been growing with high-speed due to technology.
Furthermore, in the given argument there are two major points first is the experts mistaken that spending too much time using computer has caused a decline in fitness. Second is the one quarter citizens meet the current standards for adequate physical fitness. Today’s more people use computer and laptop so must be healthy, but arguer mentioned that today’s more people less healthy. The arguer must pay attention on given contradictory statements which shows unstated assumptions.
Finally, there are different reasons to be physically unhealthy besides the economic factors. Such as, work and family stress, pollution, competition, endemic, poor eating habits, environmental conditions and so on. It is possible that a wealthy person may have poor health conditions and a poor person may have good physical healthy. In my opinion, it is in our hand to manage our budget weather we must spend on unhealthy fatty food or on healthy food habits so, a person’s physical fitness not only depends on the economic growth of the country instead of it has so many factors also.
In the end, the argument is rather weak. It is based on shaky premises and flawed logic. However, if the above assumptions are explained in the statement, it will be greatly reinforced. Therefore, the conclusion is not acceptable, more facts needed to be presented.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 390 350
No. of Characters: 1936 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.444 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.964 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.514 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.582 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.288 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.533 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.067 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 262, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ample, twenty years ago in India people dont know about western food and they ate In...
^^^^
Line 3, column 422, Rule ID: TOO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to cheese'?
Suggestion: to cheese
...e of India does not allow people to eat too cheese and bread, which increases fat make the...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 588, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...untry instead of it has so many factors also. In the end, the argument is rather ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, for example, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2009.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 389.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16452442159 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66177218389 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529562982005 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.530099934 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.45 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.45 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.70786347227 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128445545173 0.218282227539 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0428306829304 0.0743258471296 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0855747071092 0.0701772020484 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0606308312384 0.128457276422 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517328738823 0.0628817314937 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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