The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
The author of the above letter has made a very loose connection between the facts stated in the letter. There are certainly many flaws in this letter which forces us to think whether the reason stated in the above letter actually do make sense.
First of all the author said that the population of Balmer increases to a 100,000 in summer. He has given no statistics that state that what was the previous population of Balmer or by how much does this population increase? Without knowing the previous population of Balmer an exact estimation of the current population increase of the town cannot be made. Also we do not know that every summer the population increases to a 100,000. It could be lesser one year or more the other year.
He also states that in order to reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies should be reduced from 50 per day to 25 per day. There is again no statistics which shows that reducing the number of mopeds to 50 percent will reduce the accidents by 50 percent. Nowhere in the passage has the author stated that reducing the mopeds by 50 percent is directly proportional to the accidents and will help in reducing the number of accidents by 50 percent in the town of Balmer. Also what about the people who own mopeds? We also do not know that whether these accidents were caused by the people who owned mopeds or by those who rented them.
The author has made a comparison of Balmer Island to Seaville island. But we do not know the population in Seaville Island. Also the decision of Seaville's town council to reduce the moped rentals to 50 percent cannot be compared to Balmer Island's since we neither know the population nor are we sure about the exact number of moped users in both the islands. We also do not know how popular moped transportation was in Seavillle Islands. There is a possibility that moped transportation was more popular in Seaville than at Balmer or vice versa. Therefore the estimation of mopeds in Balmer based on Seaville was a bit obscure and cryptic.
In order to be more clear and specific the author should have told us the exact number of moped users in both the islands. Also in order to make a comparison between the two island the exact population of both the towns should have been mentioned. Also he should have stated whether moped transportation in Seaville was as popular or more popular in Balmer. If all these facts would have been taken care of it would have greatly increased the value of the letter and helped in further understanding of the relation between moped accidents and the population increase in the island of Balmer.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 190, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...previous population of Balmer or by how much does this population increase? Without ...
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Line 3, column 359, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...on increase of the town cannot be made. Also we do not know that every summer the po...
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Line 5, column 557, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ts by 50 percent in the town of Balmer. Also what about the people who own mopeds? W...
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Line 7, column 125, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...know the population in Seaville Island. Also the decision of Seavilles town council ...
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Line 7, column 547, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... Seaville than at Balmer or vice versa. Therefore the estimation of mopeds in Balmer base...
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Line 9, column 249, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...h the towns should have been mentioned. Also he should have stated whether moped tra...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.246 0.25644967241 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.162 0.15541462614 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.066 0.0836205057962 79% => OK
Adverbs: 0.042 0.0520304965353 81% => OK
Pronouns: 0.028 0.0272364105082 103% => OK
Prepositions: 0.15 0.125424944231 120% => OK
Participles: 0.048 0.0416121511921 115% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.50556742955 2.79052419416 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.026 0.026700313972 97% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.128 0.113004496875 113% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.022 0.0255425247493 86% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.022 0.0127820249294 172% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2697.0 2731.13054187 99% => OK
No of words: 475.0 446.07635468 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.67789473684 6.12365571057 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.57801047555 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.336842105263 0.378187486979 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.214736842105 0.287650121315 75% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.136842105263 0.208842608468 66% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0863157894737 0.135150697306 64% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50556742955 2.79052419416 90% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 207.018472906 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.376842105263 0.469332199767 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 41.929562 52.1807786196 80% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.039408867 110% => OK
Sentence length: 21.5909090909 23.2022227129 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3713981721 57.7814097925 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.590909091 141.986410481 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5909090909 23.2022227129 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.363636363636 0.724660767414 50% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.58251231527 167% => OK
Readability: 43.0645933014 51.9672348444 83% => OK
Elegance: 1.91379310345 1.8405768891 104% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.652329954721 0.441005458295 148% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.207014803587 0.135418324435 153% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.14130589466 0.0829849096947 170% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.600042389008 0.58762219726 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.166569341325 0.147661913831 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.287809109744 0.193483328276 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146180035792 0.0970749176394 151% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.427572251694 0.42659136922 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.100698301968 0.0774707102158 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.470834591118 0.312017818177 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400510277483 0.0698173142475 57% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.82512315271 166% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 5.36822660099 130% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.82389162562 212% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 14.657635468 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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