The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
The letter to the editor of Balmer Island Gazette stating the cause and trying to provide a solution to the accidents by mopeds especially during the summer months. This letter has many flaws and is ambiguous.
It is not clear what is the location of the Balmer Island ; where is it situated near the tropics or close to the equator. It is very difficult to say what kind of weather and climate this area experiences. Its is said here that population increase to 100,000; the quantification is not justified; it may or may not be due to the inflow of the nearby people due to some business or is it a tourist destination and receiving maximum incomings. It is also claimed that mopeds serves as the most important form of transportation and accidents are happening due to increase in number of population during summer months. The cause of accidents any be due to the faulty moped or conditions of the moped is not upto the mark. Instead the should be a provision of checking the working conditions of the moped. They may have become obsolete due to the long usage.
The cause of accidents can also be that traffic rules are not followed in the island properly and no regulations are there to maintain it. The writer is recommending to limit the number of moped rented everyday to 25 instead of 50. The quantification of moped is not explained by and how can only decreasing it by half the number will sufficient to decrease the number of moped-pedestrian confluence. The number of accident by decrease by 50 percent annually this number do not adds upto the given data. Many essential information is missing in the letter like what is the number of residents in the area, who all are the pedestrians which are hit by the moped whether they are children or old people, the other modes of transportations are not available in area and what are the reasons.
It is also stated that the same rule was followed in the Seaville’s town. It is not discussed what is the basis of comparing it with the Seaville’s town and how can the policy used there will also help to solve the problem in the island.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 375 350
No. of Characters: 1695 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.401 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.52 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.688 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 115 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.438 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.096 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.438 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.328 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.542 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 104, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ause and trying to provide a solution to the accidents by mopeds especially durin...
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Line 2, column 150, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...the equator. It is very difficult to say what kind of weather and climate this ar...
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Line 3, column 151, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...e due to the inflow of the nearby people due to some business or is it a tourist ...
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Line 3, column 514, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
...ions of the moped is not upto the mark. Instead the should be a provision of checking t...
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Line 4, column 27, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... long usage. The cause of accidents can also be that traffic rules are not follo...
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Line 5, column 64, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ing to limit the number of moped rented everyday to 25 instead of 50. The quantification...
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Line 5, column 94, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ed rented everyday to 25 instead of 50. The quantification of moped is not explain...
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Line 5, column 115, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... 25 instead of 50. The quantification of moped is not explained by and how can on...
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Line 5, column 264, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... number of moped-pedestrian confluence. The number of accident by decrease by 50 pe...
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Line 5, column 341, Rule ID: DONT_NEEDS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'add'?
Suggestion: add
... 50 percent annually this number do not adds upto the given data. Many essential inf...
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Line 5, column 367, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much essential information', 'a good deal of essential information'.
Suggestion: Much essential information; A good deal of essential information
...number do not adds upto the given data. Many essential information is missing in the letter like what is t...
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Line 5, column 652, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...lable in area and what are the reasons. It is also stated that the same rule w...
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Line 6, column 6, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... area and what are the reasons. It is also stated that the same rule was foll...
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Line 6, column 24, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... the reasons. It is also stated that the same rule was followed in the Seavil...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...lp to solve the problem in the island.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1746.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 375.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.656 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80810260576 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461333333333 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.4687115337 57.8364921388 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.125 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4375 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.625 5.70786347227 28% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304768623089 0.218282227539 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0903849665306 0.0743258471296 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0932812307066 0.0701772020484 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142069250731 0.128457276422 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0802150383958 0.0628817314937 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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