The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The letter sent to the Balmer Island Gazette shows the Balmer Island’s town council action to reduce the accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians during summer, which in this time the population can have an increase of 100,000 people. The solution found by the town council is to limit the rental companies to rent from 50 to 25 mopeds during the summer months in order to decrease the accidents numbers. Althought this might be an easy solution, it is just a temporary short-time solution that will never really solve the problem.
The reduction of the mopeds in the streets of Balmer Island certainly will decrease the number of accidents, it is just a matter of probability. If the city reduce the number of vehicles on the street, is expected that the total amount of accidents will also reduce.However, this is a poorly solution adopted by the city’s council and a lot of adjacent problems could surge derived from the reduction of mopeds.
In the first place, the reduction of the vehicles will generate a logistic problem in the island. The letter only indicates that the number of mopeds will be reduced, but there is not another act from the town council to supply this deficit of transport. For example, more buses or taxis need to be in circulation in order to supply the transport demand. So, this act from the council ought have a complementation in order to be effective.
Furthermore, the letter to the editor affirms that the island have always an increase of population during summer months. Although it is not specified by the exert where this people came from, there is a big probability that they are turist. The decrease of means of transport allied with a logistic crisis could discourage the touristic immigration, adding more economic problem to the natives from the island.
Also, another tactic should be used by the council. A more extensive surveillance of the streets and highways of the island, putting more police officers or speed regulators is also a short-time solution that is highly more effective. The paper of the city is to create laws in order to develop and increase the life’s quality of the native and visitors and not to restrict their liberty because of administration’s problems.
In conclusion, the solution found by the town council to reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrian is very superficial and could bring even bigger problems, like the decrease of tourism and transport problems in the island. One way to solve this issue without compromising the Balmer’s logistic is adopt a more effective control of the traffic or the increase of public transport vehicles to supply the demand with the reduction of mopeds.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 453 350
No. of Characters: 2199 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.613 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.854 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.604 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 181 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.647 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.64 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.62 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.076 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 394, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'accidents'' or 'accident's'?
Suggestion: accidents'; accident's
... summer months in order to decrease the accidents numbers. Althought this might be an eas...
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Line 2, column 177, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...bility. If the city reduce the number of vehicles on the street, is expected that...
^^
Line 2, column 267, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...al amount of accidents will also reduce.However, this is a poorly solution adopted by t...
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Line 3, column 385, Rule ID: OUGHT_SAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'ought to have'?
Suggestion: ought to have
...t demand. So, this act from the council ought have a complementation in order to be effect...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 154, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...months. Although it is not specified by the exert where this people came from, there is a...
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Line 4, column 170, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... it is not specified by the exert where this people came from, there is a big probab...
^^^^
Line 6, column 324, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'adopted'.
Suggestion: adopted
...promising the Balmer's logistic is adopt a more effective control ^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, really, so, for example, in conclusion, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 55.5748502994 131% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2340.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 455.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14285714286 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25149218436 2.78398813304 117% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446153846154 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.0679044419 57.8364921388 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.647058824 119.503703932 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7647058824 23.324526521 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.70786347227 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237356641343 0.218282227539 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0845297219804 0.0743258471296 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106239446279 0.0701772020484 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13225226271 0.128457276422 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0798494999743 0.0628817314937 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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