The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The letter to the editor written by a Central Plaza store owner affirms that the number of stores in Central Plaza has decreased due to the increase of skateboarding activity. Furtermore, the shoppers related an increase of litter and vandalism, and due to this fact, they asking to the city to prohibit the skaters in order to solve this problem.
In the first place, the letter shows only one side view of the problem. The Central Plaza store owner belives that the skateboarding activity is the main source of the decrease in the number of shoppers, but a more aspects also need to be evaluated and are not content of the letter.
The decrease of the shopping activity in Central Plaza could be explained by an economical crisis that is afecting this city. Normally, this type of crisis is slow, which is represented by the time of two years that the letter afirms. The letter doesn’t indicates the exact year that it is talking about, but is possible to place this event, for example, at the “real state crisis” that ocurred in 2007 due to the US housing bubble, showing that the decrease of the number of shoppers in Central Plaza came from economical problems and not for skateboarding activity.
Moreover, the increase of skateboarding might an effect of the decrease of the number of shopper and not the contrary. In a place where the flux of people is decreasing and abandoned imobles are showing up, for example the abandoned stores that could appear in Central Plaza, is the perfect place to bring activities like skateboarding, litter and vandalism. After that, a “snowball effect” could start, where the popularity of skateboarding in that place is increasing more and more and the fear of the shoppers increases also more and more, deacreasing the shopping activity.
Under thoses circunstances, it’s not wrong that the store owner asks for help to the city, but he/she need to understand that the skateboarding acticity could be the wrong cause of this effect and the act of curb the skaters probably will not return the number of shoppers to high levels, but will only create an empty place with anyone.
In conclusion, the city and the stores owners need to study deeply the source of problem that are decreasing the number of shoppers in Central Place. Judging that the skateboarding activity is the main cause of the crisis is very superficial and unreal. Maybe an economical aid plan created by the city’s mayor or a reduction of taxes could be more effective to the return of the high number of shoppers in Central Place than just prohibiting the skateboarding activity.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The Central Plaza store owner belives that the skateboarding activity is the main source of the decrease in the number of shoppers, but a more aspects also need to be evaluated and are not content of the letter.
Error: belives Suggestion: believes
Sentence: The decrease of the shopping activity in Central Plaza could be explained by an economical crisis that is afecting this city.
Error: afecting Suggestion: affecting
Sentence: Normally, this type of crisis is slow, which is represented by the time of two years that the letter afirms.
Error: afirms Suggestion: firms
Sentence: The letter doesn't indicates the exact year that it is talking about, but is possible to place this event, for example, at the real state crisis that ocurred in 2007 due to the US housing bubble, showing that the decrease of the number of shoppers in Central Plaza came from economical problems and not for skateboarding activity.
Error: doesn Suggestion: does
Error: ocurred Suggestion: occurred
Sentence: In a place where the flux of people is decreasing and abandoned imobles are showing up, for example the abandoned stores that could appear in Central Plaza, is the perfect place to bring activities like skateboarding, litter and vandalism.
Error: imobles Suggestion: ambles
Sentence: After that, a snowball effect could start, where the popularity of skateboarding in that place is increasing more and more and the fear of the shoppers increases also more and more, deacreasing the shopping activity.
Error: deacreasing Suggestion: decreasing
Sentence: Under thoses circunstances, it's not wrong that the store owner asks for help to the city, but he/she need to understand that the skateboarding acticity could be the wrong cause of this effect and the act of curb the skaters probably will not return the number of shoppers to high levels, but will only create an empty place with anyone.
Error: acticity Suggestion: activity
Error: circunstances Suggestion: circumstances
Error: thoses Suggestion: No alternate word
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 446 350
No. of Characters: 2101 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.596 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.711 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.58 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.726 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.425 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.69 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.141 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 81, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
... Central Plaza could be explained by an economical crisis that is afecting this city. Norm...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 527, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
... of shoppers in Central Plaza came from economical problems and not for skateboarding acti...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 371, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ding, litter and vandalism. After that, a 'snowball effect' could start...
^
Line 6, column 263, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...s very superficial and unreal. Maybe an economical aid plan created by the city's may...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, may, moreover, so, for example, in conclusion, talking about, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 16.3942115768 6% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2190.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 444.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93243243243 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7770078472 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.414414414414 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.9 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.4760513205 57.8364921388 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.428571429 119.503703932 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.7142857143 23.324526521 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.70786347227 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320902534238 0.218282227539 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137689341274 0.0743258471296 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113869255733 0.0701772020484 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195226195706 0.128457276422 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0750215089264 0.0628817314937 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 14.3799401198 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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