The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The claim that due to the increase in the popularity of skateboarding in the past two years has led to the decrease of the business in the Central Plaza is an arrant absurd. This argument is rife with holes and assumptions, and thus, not strong enough to lead to the recommendation of the city to prohibit skateboarding in central plaza.
Firstly the author claims that the number of shoppers Central Plaza has decreased over the past few years and the store owners believe that skateboarding must have been the reason behind it. The reports based on which this claim was made might have been altered to reduce the recent increase in skateboarding in the plaza. Most of the shops in the plaza sell products which are a competition to the skateboards. As increase in the recent popularity of the skateboarding led to the decrease in the store owners business, they must have plotted this depraved act and must have altered the reports. Hence the authors claim on store owners belief that skateboarding has led to the decrease in shoppers can be eradicated as they made that statement for their own profit.
Furthermore, the author claims that there has been an increase in the amount of litter and vandalism in the plaza. It must have many years since the plaza was built, and the place must have deteriorated and rotted in recent times due to lack of maintenance and cleanliness and it is the duty of the maintenance staff to keep the premises clean at all times. It is true that skateboarding sometimes leads to a damage in property but it is not fair to blame skateboarding completely for the vandalism of the plaza. Many other factors must have played a major role in leading to the vandalism of the place, but placing the entire burden on skateboarding is unfair and unjust. Hence the authors blame on skateboarding being solely responsible for destroying the plaza can be eradicated.
Finally, the author claims that the Central Plaza will prosper again if the city prohibits skateboarding and it's business returns to it's previously high levels. The plaza must be an old structure and this must have led the deterioration of the place recently and due to lack of maintenance. During it's initial days of commencement, the plaza must have been an attraction in the city and this led to the booming of the business for the shop owners. As days passed by other plazas must have opened in the city which led to the decrease in sales as the Central Plaza lost it's authenticity. Instead of blaming skateboarding, the plaza owners must focus on refurbishing the existing building and adding new attractions which might lead to a possible increase in their business.
The authors recommendation on eradicating skateboarding from the Central Plaza based on false reports and envious shop owners doesn't make a stand for his claim. Hence the authors claim was made hastily, without completely studying the facts and his recommendation can be rejected.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 503 350
No. of Characters: 2414 1500
No. of Different Words: 195 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.736 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.799 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.787 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.474 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.524 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.474 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.401 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.591 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 597, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... act and must have altered the reports. Hence the authors claim on store owners belie...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 630, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'owners'' or 'owner's'?
Suggestion: owners'; owner's
...ports. Hence the authors claim on store owners belief that skateboarding has led to th...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 408, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'damage'.
Suggestion: damage
...e that skateboarding sometimes leads to a damage in property but it is not fair to blame...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 674, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... on skateboarding is unfair and unjust. Hence the authors blame on skateboarding bein...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 449, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ng of the business for the shop owners. As days passed by other plazas must have o...
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Line 9, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ble increase in their business. The authors recommendation on eradicating skateboar...
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Line 9, column 127, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...n false reports and envious shop owners doesnt make a stand for his claim. Hence the a...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 162, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ners doesnt make a stand for his claim. Hence the authors claim was made hastily, wit...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, so, then, thus, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2455.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 502.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89043824701 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84981238193 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.396414342629 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 755.1 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2015372806 57.8364921388 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 129.210526316 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4210526316 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21052631579 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289861457769 0.218282227539 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115399460674 0.0743258471296 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.074852788984 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192583005292 0.128457276422 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700397991544 0.0628817314937 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.