The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a Relannian newspaper.
Industry analysts report that the number of dairy farms in Relanna has increased by 25 percent over the last decade. Also, recent innovations in milking technology make it possible for farmers to significantly increase the efficiency of the milking process, allowing them to collect more milk in less time with minimal human intervention. In fact, data from the Relannian Department of Agriculture indicate that labor costs at the majority of Relannian dairy farms are actually lower now than they were ten years ago. Despite increased efficiency and lower labor costs, a carton of cream — a dairy product made from milk — at the local food market costs twice as much as it did two years ago. The only explanation for this dramatic price increase is that farmers are inflating the price of cream to increase their profits.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
The above letter states that, in the town of Relannian a carton of cream costs twice as much as it did two years ago despite increased in efficiency and lower labor costs. Hence the explanation provided for this increase in price is that farmers are inflating the price of cream to increase their profits. But there can three other explanations that can cause the increase in price of cream over the last two years.
Firstly, it is mentioned in the letter that the dairy farms in Relanna has increased by 25 percent over the last decade. This might have happened due to increased demand of dairy products over the last decade which means that the population must have increased a lot in the area. If the demand is still higher than supply, this could lead to higher prices in milk products including carton of creams.
Also recently, Relanna has received a major technological boom in the milking technology which has resulted in increase in efficiency of the milking process by reducing the time required to collect milk with minimal human intervention. Another explanation that can be concluded from this fact is that this milking technology involves using more of machines than humans to produce milk. As this technology is recent, the machine prices might have not yet stabilised due to high demand for them by dairy farmers. This might lead to increase in cost price of milk production and hence leading to increase in price for carton of cream.
Finally, The labor costs might have decreased during the last decade but as times progress newer technology emerges and hence miscellaneous expenses can increase too. For example, the packaging used ten years ago for cream carton made it expire earlier, and hence, was cheaper than the packaging avalaible today.
Hence, there can multiple other explanation for increase in price for carton of milk in the Relanna town, like increase in demand,high machine and packaging prices.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 325 350
No. of Characters: 1578 1500
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.246 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.855 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.431 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.489 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.401 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.651 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.131 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 173, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ed in efficiency and lower labor costs. Hence the explanation provided for this incre...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...k products including carton of creams. Also recently, Relanna has received a major ...
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Line 4, column 237, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d ten years ago for cream carton made it expire earlier, and hence, was cheaper t...
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Line 6, column 130, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , high
...he Relanna town, like increase in demand,high machine and packaging prices.
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Line 6, column 166, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mand,high machine and packaging prices.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, so, still, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1615.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 324.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98456790123 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50068387232 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481481481481 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.1663575217 57.8364921388 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 124.230769231 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9230769231 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30769230769 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219197187743 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100397235987 0.0743258471296 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0988508894566 0.0701772020484 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128943503534 0.128457276422 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0677316002086 0.0628817314937 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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