The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a Relannian newspaper.
Industry analysts report that the number of dairy farms in Relanna has increased by 25 percent over the last decade. Also, recent innovations in milking technology make it possible for farmers to significantly increase the efficiency of the milking process, allowing them to collect more milk in less time with minimal human intervention. In fact, data from the Relannian Department of Agriculture indicate that labor costs at the majority of Relannian dairy farms are actually lower now than they were ten years ago. Despite increased efficiency and lower labor costs, a carton of cream—a dairy product made from milk—at the local food market costs twice as much as it did two years ago. The only explanation for this dramatic price increase is that farmers are inflating the price of cream to increase their profits
In news paper the report has said number of dairy firms in Relana has increased and recent innovations in milking technology make it possible to increase the efficiency of miliking process in less time with minimal labour.The data said the labour cost is low than ten years ago.Despite increase in efficiency and low labour cost the dairy product made from milk at the local market costs twice than two years.The explanation claimed that this dramatic price increase is because they want to increase their profits.But here the the claimed reason is not clear and it needs more evidence to support the claimed explanations.
Firstly,from the data it indicate the labour cost is low than ten years in majority of the dairy farms.But here the author has not give proper explanations the reason behind low cost.It might be happen that before ten years ago , the economic condition of the dairy farms was good.Now they are not well economic condition to pay high cost to the hired labours.
Moreover,the dairy milk product price increased than two years ago.the author claimed the reason only is to increase their profit. But it is not the proper assumptionsto increase the price.it might be happen that technology has increased the milking process. but the generation of milk sources is more with respect to the population. may be the population is less .so the dairy farms are increasing the price to fill up the revenues in Relanna.
Author failed to explain main factors behind increasing the price of dairy milk product
Comments
Essay evaluation report
minimum 3 arguments wanted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 263 350
No. of Characters: 1245 1500
No. of Different Words: 120 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.027 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.734 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.352 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 84 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 60 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 36 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 43.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 26.928 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.515 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.802 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.123 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 4, Rule ID: NEWS_PAPER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'newspaper'? This word sequence is usually spelled together.
Suggestion: newspaper
In news paper the report has said number of dairy fir...
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Line 1, column 223, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: The
...rocess in less time with minimal labour.The data said the labour cost is low than t...
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Suggestion: Despite
...e labour cost is low than ten years ago.Despite increase in efficiency and low labour c...
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Line 1, column 410, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...local market costs twice than two years.The explanation claimed that this dramatic ...
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Suggestion: But
...use they want to increase their profits.But here the the claimed reason is not clea...
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Line 1, column 524, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...want to increase their profits.But here the the claimed reason is not clear and it need...
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Line 1, column 524, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...want to increase their profits.But here the the claimed reason is not clear and it need...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , from
...ort the claimed explanations. Firstly,from the data it indicate the labour cost is...
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Line 3, column 26, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'indicates'?
Suggestion: indicates
...planations. Firstly,from the data it indicate the labour cost is low than ten years i...
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Line 3, column 104, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: But
...en years in majority of the dairy farms.But here the author has not give proper exp...
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Line 3, column 132, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'given'.
Suggestion: given
...dairy farms.But here the author has not give proper explanations the reason behind l...
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Suggestion: It
...explanations the reason behind low cost.It might be happen that before ten years a...
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Suggestion: ,
...ight be happen that before ten years ago , the economic condition of the dairy far...
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Suggestion: Now
...c condition of the dairy farms was good.Now they are not well economic condition to...
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Suggestion: , the
...h cost to the hired labours. Moreover,the dairy milk product price increased than...
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Line 5, column 260, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: But
...logy has increased the milking process. but the generation of milk sources is more ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: May
...is more with respect to the population. may be the population is less .so the dairy...
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Line 5, column 364, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: .
...opulation. may be the population is less .so the dairy farms are increasing the pr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, may, moreover, so, well, in fact, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1274.0 2260.96107784 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 254.0 441.139720559 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0157480315 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.56307096286 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58679698598 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 204.123752495 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48031496063 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 392.4 705.55239521 56% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 19.7664670659 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 22.8473053892 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 188.577164415 57.8364921388 326% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 182.0 119.503703932 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.2857142857 23.324526521 156% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.70786347227 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183808988017 0.218282227539 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0978347999433 0.0743258471296 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437396635547 0.0701772020484 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118007613937 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536436747438 0.0628817314937 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.4 14.3799401198 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.197005988 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 98.500998004 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 57.0 12.3882235529 460% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.4 11.1389221557 147% => OK
text_standard: 57.0 11.9071856287 479% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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