The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a Relannian newspaper.
Industry analysts report that the number of dairy farms in Relanna has increased by 25 percent over the last decade. Also, recent innovations in milking technology make it possible for farmers to significantly increase the efficiency of the milking process, allowing them to collect more milk in less time with minimal human intervention. In fact, data from the Relannian Department of Agriculture indicate that labor costs at the majority of Relannian dairy farms are actually lower now than they were ten years ago. Despite increased efficiency and lower labor costs, a carton of cream—a dairy product made from milk—at the local food market costs twice as much as it did two years ago. The only explanation for this dramatic price increase is that farmers are inflating the price of cream to increase their profits.
The author of the letter tries to conclude that farmers are inflating their prices from a bunch of data about labor prices changes in a ten years period and by citing an increase in the number of farms. Unfortunately, there is a considerable amount of flaws in the argument that deeply weakens its compelling and convincing power. In particular, there is an incorrect use of percents and some assumptions about local markert and past economical circumstances are not lucid.
To begin with, there is a possible incorrect interpretation of percents. As it is clear, an increase of 25% can result in d...
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Sentence: In particular, there is an incorrect use of percents and some assumptions about local markert and past economical circumstances are not lucid.
Error: markert Suggestion: market
Sentence: As it is clear, an increase of 25 can result in dramatically different situations depending on different base circumstances for the percents calculum.
Error: calculum Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: As a matter of fact, there are so many occurrences and events that could have happend in ten years
Error: happend Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: While it could be concretely fundamental to analyse the prices of a number of years ago other than ten, it is also incontrovertible that, if info and data are given about ten years ago, suddensly shifting the reasoning to two years ago is resulsts in an opaque analysis.
Error: resulsts Suggestion: results
Error: suddensly Suggestion: suddenly
Error: analyse Suggestion: analyst
Sentence: What is more, local market now can be buying carton of creams from distant farms or farms that are not considered in the citeded industry analysts report.
Error: citeded Suggestion: cited
Sentence: This would open to a plethora of new explanations that are totally indipendent from all the given instances.
Error: indipendent Suggestion: independent
Sentence: This would be enough to conclude that local farmres have no role in the increased carton prices.
Error: farmres Suggestion: farmers
Sentence: To sum up, the authours neglects to furnish the analysis that is necessary to maintain the proposed conclusion.
Error: authours Suggestion: authors
Sentence: In fact, too many discretely different interpretations can be cited about the same data and they would lead to pivotally discording conclusion that, eventually, would prove the argument too much flawed to be trusted and quoted.
Error: discording Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: pivotally Suggestion: No alternate word
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 578 350
No. of Characters: 2721 1500
No. of Different Words: 254 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.903 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.708 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.648 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 163 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.524 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.673 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.308 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.57 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 435, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...ssumptions about local markert and past economical circumstances are not lucid. To begi...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 315, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'weaken'
Suggestion: weaken
...wer than ten years ago can dramatically weakened if, for instance, the national economic...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, hence, if, nonetheless, so, then, while, for example, for instance, in fact, in particular, as a matter of fact, to begin with, to sum up, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 19.6327345309 194% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2800.0 2260.96107784 124% => OK
No of words: 578.0 441.139720559 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84429065744 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90322654589 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70213857951 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 204.123752495 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458477508651 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 886.5 705.55239521 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.001038954 57.8364921388 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.0 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9 23.324526521 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.7 5.70786347227 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0861153608383 0.218282227539 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0310397785655 0.0743258471296 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0365186356675 0.0701772020484 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0502485946964 0.128457276422 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401449475428 0.0628817314937 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.3799401198 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 98.500998004 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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