The following appeared in a memo from the business manager of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.
"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, all of the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In this argument author urge to consider that the chain of cheese store should discontinue selling the imported cheese and should concentrate more on domestic cheese as the chain's subscribers are more inclined in buying that. To support this recommendation, he cited that domestic cheddar cheese from Wisconsin is among the top selling cheese that cheese-store chain sells. While some people agree to this, I find this argument unconvincing for some reasons.
First, the author states that Chedder cheese is among top five best selling cheese and hence should be the only cheese the store should sell. This claim can not be accepted as it stands. It is entirely possible that the sales of other four top selling cheese are short by a small margin and then discontinuing those products will ultimately create a loss for the entire chain. The owner opened a new store in the state of Wisconsin where the residents like domestic made cheese but what about the other stores in other cities as this chain have their stores throughout the united states. Perhaps in california residents like imported cheese from Europe rather domestic cheese sold by this chain as author never mention the preference of other states. While the statement of discontinuing the the existing imported cheese seems to appear a robust idea , it deficit between what states and what there is evidence for it and is too large to be overlooked. This ultimately cause the week argument that will court against the author's conclusion.
Second, on the basis of survey, author hypothesized that the cheese chain should get rid of the inventory of the existing imported cheese and rather focus on producing and selling the domestic cheese. This assumption is unwarranted as there is nothing said about the participants of this survey. It might be possible that the survey is done only in the states where people like domestic cheese that makes this survey biased and not reasonable. Also, the cheese store is a large supplier and the seller of cheese all across the country so they must be having the large inventory. If there will be a discontinuation of the important cheese then what will happen to the existing inventory that already procured from all over the world? It would be a huge lose for the company. Therefore the assumption is overgeneralized and author lacks compelling and affluent reasoning to convince his proposal.
However, it might be possible that people of united states like the quality of domestic cheese as it is locally made and is rather fresh as compared to the imported cheese which is made few months ago along with certain use of preservatives but we do not know which state wants domestic and which wants imported cheese as author never mentioned it. Hence the augment is flawed in the way that it fails to substantiate the strong evidence and is teemed with poor reasoning. The carful perusing of the evident provided in the argument reveals that many questions have been left unanswered whiteout which reader cannot consider it to be consequential.
On conclusion this is not a strong argument.To bolster this, the author must at very least, should provide the concrete evidence regarding the preference of both types of cheese, perhaps with the help of survey, which will strengthen the author claim.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 552 350
No. of Characters: 2712 1500
No. of Different Words: 237 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.847 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.913 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.549 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 204 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.146 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.506 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.083 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eese and hence should be the only cheese the store should sell. This claim can no...
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Line 3, column 790, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...s. While the statement of discontinuing the the existing imported cheese seems to appea...
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Line 3, column 790, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...s. While the statement of discontinuing the the existing imported cheese seems to appea...
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Line 3, column 852, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ted cheese seems to appear a robust idea , it deficit between what states and what...
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Line 3, column 1023, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ek argument that will court against the authors conclusion. Second, on the basis of...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...t would be a huge lose for the company. Therefore the assumption is overgeneralized and a...
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Line 7, column 304, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "wants imported" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'importing' or 'to be imported'.
Suggestion: importing; to be imported
...ch state wants domestic and which wants imported cheese as author never mentioned it. He...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ed cheese as author never mentioned it. Hence the augment is flawed in the way that i...
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Line 7, column 356, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ese as author never mentioned it. Hence the augment is flawed in the way that it fails to s...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: To
...onclusion this is not a strong argument.To bolster this, the author must at very ...
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Line 9, column 72, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ong argument.To bolster this, the author must at very least, should provide the c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 28.8173652695 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2762.0 2260.96107784 122% => OK
No of words: 551.0 441.139720559 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01270417423 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84493438435 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60626900017 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 204.123752495 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442831215971 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 854.1 705.55239521 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.7713791714 57.8364921388 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.523809524 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2380952381 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2380952381 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226349564675 0.218282227539 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755505524932 0.0743258471296 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0715528917141 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132996424308 0.128457276422 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757476468053 0.0628817314937 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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