The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
while the bottlenecks on Blue highway (bh) might be an everyday issue faced by locals, the author’s discussion of the two possible solutions and the reason for dismissing one while recommending the other is rife with holes. The rationale presented is not cogent enough since the evidences presented are themselves questionable.
Firstly, the entire debate is initiated on concerns raised by the residents, but the number of complaints received by the government is not shared. Subsequently, the finding of how many of these were lodged by people who travel regularly during the rush-hour is missing. it could be limited residents might have raised multiple complaints and vast majority of them hardly travel on this route or during the concerned slot. these facts are critically vital to understand the severity of the problem.
one solution explored is widening of bh, which has been suggested by motorists’ lobby. again, we are not sure how many members are impacted by the jam-pack on routine basis. The idea is rejected based on the case of Green highway (gh) where the situation has become worse after implementation of this workaround. However, no logic has been stated by the writer behind how the problem has increased even after addition of a new track. it could be that the overall population has increased after opening of a new housing society in the area or some new workplaces have sprung up in city while extension of gh was in progress. There is another possibility that the tax on cars might have been dropped resulting in purchase of more automobiles. any of these could have contributed in increment in number of vehicles on the road during the peak-time. another persuasive reason could be closing of a patch of gh for maintenance work at one or more points resulting in blockages.
The article recommends introduction of a new dedicated lane for bicycle. The support has been sort by the fact that many dwellers are already inclined towards cycling, thus this will encourage many of them to use cycles over motors. Here, once again the content falls shorts as it has not been explicitly mentioned if a new track will be constructed on the side of bh or a lane of existing road will be restricted for the purpose. if the latter is the case, the consequences of reducing the space for other transport must be determined. also, no statistics have presented as evidence. we are not sure what percentage of the actual impacted population will be interested in this alternate mode of transport. also, as the entire dilemma is based on time extra time spent in travelling, we are forced to think if the people rushing to urban center would be willing to choose mechanical wheeler over faced-paced engine-driven motor.
A stress-free route is preferred convenience by all, but before executing of any of the proposal, the authorities must take into account different aspects to determine effectiveness. Otherwise, the trouble will persist or even increase in due course.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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while the bottlenecks on Blue highway bh migh...
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...ularly during the rush-hour is missing. it could be limited residents might have r...
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...his route or during the concerned slot. these facts are critically vital to understan...
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...understand the severity of the problem. one solution explored is widening of bh,...
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...icles on the road during the peak-time. another persuasive reason could be closing of a...
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... or more points resulting in blockages. The article recommends introduction of a...
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...onvenience by all, but before executing of any of the proposal, the authorities must take...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, thus, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 55.5748502994 135% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2496.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 498.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01204819277 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89577727733 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 204.123752495 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54016064257 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 807.3 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9752220231 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.52173913 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.652173913 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.65217391304 5.70786347227 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0392728259899 0.218282227539 18% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.010661342435 0.0743258471296 14% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0167356378755 0.0701772020484 24% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0168259464939 0.128457276422 13% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.020327313066 0.0628817314937 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 98.500998004 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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