The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College, it suggested that new dormitories should be built based on the three facts 1) based on current trends the college population will double in 50 years, 2) average rent of apartment in the town has risen and 3) more student will enroll becasue of of the new attractive dormitories.Close scrutiny of each of these facts, however, reveals than none of them lands credible support to the suggestion. So, before the suggestion can be evaluated properly, three questions must be answered.
Firstly, Will the current trend of growing student number continue to follow for the coming 50 years? It may be the case that student will be attracted to other colleges than Buckingham in coming years, then the student enrollment will obviously deline. Furthermore, world is pushing towards digitalization, it may be the case that the various degrees will be offered online to students in the comming years, which will make the increased dorm useless. So, if any of the above cases has merit then the conclusion drawn in the original memo is significantly hindered.
Secondly, will the new drom attract more student? Well student do look at the dorm facility in college, but it may not be the deciding factor. If the college is not offering attractive courses in the respective field then the attractive dormitories has no use. And dormitories may be the last thing they may look at before deciding the college. So if the above case hold water then the argument presented in the memo is hampered.
Thirdly, does the average rate of apartment which is increasing includes the rate for the students also? It may be the case that the there are places where student can find cheaper accomodation than the dorm itself. Morover, student tend to live in groups in one apartment and share rent, in this senario the off-campus housing may be cheaper than the on-campus housing. So, if above cases are true then the concllusion of the memo is seriously weakened.
To sum up, the argument is logically flawed as it stands because of its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author of the memo is able to provide more evidences and answer the three questions then the the suggestion about the addition of new dormitories in Buckingham College can be properly analyzed.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 394 350
No. of Characters: 1890 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.455 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.797 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.619 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.176 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.553 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.56 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.058 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 283, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'student' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'students'.
Suggestion: students
...rtment in the town has risen and 3 more student will enroll becasue of of the new attra...
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Line 1, column 311, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: of
... and 3 more student will enroll becasue of of the new attractive dormitories.Close sc...
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Line 1, column 348, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Close
...ue of of the new attractive dormitories.Close scrutiny of each of these facts, howeve...
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Line 1, column 348, Rule ID: CLOSE_SCRUTINY[1]
Message: Use simply 'scrutiny'.
Suggestion: Scrutiny
...ue of of the new attractive dormitories.Close scrutiny of each of these facts, however, reveal...
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Line 3, column 336, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...italization, it may be the case that the various degrees will be offered online t...
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Line 3, column 455, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...h will make the increased dorm useless. So, if any of the above cases has merit then t...
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Line 5, column 144, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... but it may not be the deciding factor. If the college is not offering attractive ...
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Line 5, column 346, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ay look at before deciding the college. So if the above case hold water then the arg...
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Line 5, column 371, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g the college. So if the above case hold water then the argument presented in the...
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Line 7, column 372, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... be cheaper than the on-campus housing. So, if above cases are true then the concllusi...
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Line 9, column 214, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...ces and answer the three questions then the the suggestion about the addition of new do...
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Line 9, column 214, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...ces and answer the three questions then the the suggestion about the addition of new do...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1947.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 393.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95419847328 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74734463508 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491094147583 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 90.5298513157 57.8364921388 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.529411765 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1176470588 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23529411765 5.70786347227 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200575831806 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620575217269 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0679254966353 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119279907163 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607604505535 0.0628817314937 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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