The following appeared in a memo from the new vice president of Sartorian, a company that manufactures men's clothing.
"Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulties in obtaining reliable supplies of high quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our alpaca overcoat. Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. This coat should sell very well: since we have not offered an alpaca overcoat for five years and since our major competitor no longer makes an alpaca overcoat, there will be pent-up customer demand. Also, since the price of most types of clothing has increased in each of the past five years, customers should be willing to pay significantly higher prices for alpaca overcoats than they did five years ago, and our company profits will increase."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
It might be true that the author's assumption of increasing the company profits by producing the alpaca overcoat due to lack of competition. But this argument is rife with holes and assumptions, and thus, not strong enough to support the authors claim.
Firstly, the author claims that the company had difficulties in acquiring reliable supplies of high quality of wood fabric and portrayed that this was the reason behind the discontinuation of their alpaca coat production. There might be many reasons and facts which might affect the author's claim. Firstly the price of the wood fabric which is used as the raw material for alpaca coat must have been to expensive for the company five year's ago. Secondly, the company's competitor might have stared producing a better quality of the alpaca coat, which in-turn decreased the company's sales and affected it's profits. . To portray a positive image, the company must have provided false claims of unreliable quality and soon stopped it's production. These assumptions must be enough not to back the author's claim of discontinuation of the product five years ago.
Secondly, the author claims that a new fabric supplier has inspired the company to start producing their alpaca coat again. The main reason for the discontinuation of the coat five year's ago was due to the unreliable quality of the wood fabric. It is not evident that the new fabric supplier provides a better quality of raw material than the previous or the available one's. The supplier must have provided a fake sample in order to convince the company to buy his product, so that he can profit from them and the company goes into a loss due to a bad quality product. This mere reason is enough for the company to prevent the production of the alpaca coats and this undermines the author's claim to restart the coat's production in the first place.
Furthermore, the the author claims that its major competitor no longer makes an alpaca overcoat, there will be pent-up customer demand. There might be many reasons it's competitor stopped producing the coat. Firstly, there might be a decrease in the demand for the alpaca coat in the past few years and the competitor must have incurred huge amounts of losses. Secondly,an alternative product must have become popular in the past few years and this led to the competitors decision in stop producing the alpaca coat. Since the company has been out of the alpaca coat industry for the past five years, better market study is required before taking a major decision that the authors seeks to select.
Finally, the author claim that the prices of other pieces of clothing has hiked up in the past few years, customers should be willing to pay significantly higher prices for alpaca overcoats than they did five years ago and it increases the company's profits. The prices of other types of clothing must have increased due to increase in demand. A pair of jeans is popular worldwide but a t-shirt or a skirt is not an advisable clothing choice in countries with lower temperatures. Hence increasing the price of jeans by a small amount of fraction will not decrease it's profits, but increasing the price of the alpaca coat might not fetch the profits the author seeks as the alpaca coat is suitable only in few parts of the world. Hence considering all such factors a suitable decision must be taken.
The claims by the author are not sufficient enough to back up his statement of producing the alpaca coat again and his argument has many many loop holes in it. The above proofs clearly show that the author's argument is based on a weak base and his claim cannot withstand anymore.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 624 350
No. of Characters: 2980 1500
No. of Different Words: 238 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.998 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.776 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.474 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 214 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 145 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.343 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.562 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 27, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
It might be true that the authors assumption of increasing the company pr...
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Line 3, column 614, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ompanys sales and affected its profits. . To portray a positive image, the compan...
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Line 5, column 712, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'coats'' or 'coat's'?
Suggestion: coats'; coat's
...rmines the authors claim to restart the coats production in the first place. Furt...
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Line 7, column 14, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...on in the first place. Furthermore, the the author claims that its major competitor...
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Line 7, column 14, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...on in the first place. Furthermore, the the author claims that its major competitor...
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Line 7, column 369, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , an
...ncurred huge amounts of losses. Secondly,an alternative product must have become po...
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Line 9, column 480, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...e in countries with lower temperatures. Hence increasing the price of jeans by a smal...
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Line 9, column 729, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...uitable only in few parts of the world. Hence considering all such factors a suitable...
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Line 11, column 133, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: many
... alpaca coat again and his argument has many many loop holes in it. The above proofs clea...
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Line 11, column 200, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... The above proofs clearly show that the authors argument is based on a weak base and hi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, second, secondly, so, thus, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 55.5748502994 137% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3028.0 2260.96107784 134% => OK
No of words: 623.0 441.139720559 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86035313002 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.99599519102 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52524848895 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 204.123752495 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.394863563403 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 929.7 705.55239521 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6648291891 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.12 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.92 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0985107727914 0.218282227539 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.038580191484 0.0743258471296 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479800587379 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0555255589591 0.128457276422 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586979459188 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 98.500998004 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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