Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The claim and the reason clearly lean toward's the fact that, a nations cultural traditions are preserved and generated primarily in the cities for the future generation. It is true that majority of a nations population live in the cities nowadays, rather than in the countryside, but it is completely absurd that a nation's traditions are completely dependent on the cities and the claim that in order for the tradition to exist, the government has to provide financial support is just unbelievable.
Majority of the people in a country live in cities due to abundance in opportunities for stable career and a steady life without any interventions. Cities also expose a human to a variety of opportunities which they might not see in a countryside or a rural area. Many other financial reasons attract people to make a living in a city, but the fact that their traditions exist in the cities is not one of them. It is true that the people living in an urban area can make their traditions more flamboyant and extravagant without actually having the complete knowledge regarding the occasion, but the people in urban areas rather have strong belief's and ideologies towards their customs and traditions. Diwali or The Festival of Lights, is a festival celebrated in India. In cities there is a common misconception that Diwali entails to the burning of crackers, but it actually signifies the triumph of good over evil, and in accordance to that, candles are lit so that there is no darkness, relating to the defeat of the evil. Hence many such misconceptions by the people residing in the urban areas in the recent times, have led to the disappearance of actual customs and rituals that are to be followed. Hence the reason for the claim that the cities preserve a nations tradition doesn't exactly qualify.
Furthermore, it is true that the cities need more financial support than the rural areas as more people live in the cities and most of the country's economy depends largely on the urban sector. This led to the dissolution of the rural economy as the urban sector became a major focus in the eyes of the government. Urban areas not only play a huge role in a country's economy, but it is in this sector that most of the corruption takes place. Providing the cities with huge amounts of capital without proper governance is a real risk and can lead to the failure of the ruling body. It is the rural people too who pay their taxes and play their part in a country's development. A country's agriculture sector mainly depends on the people pertaining to the rural areas. Hence diverting the money completely toward the cities is just unjust and we need to focus on our rural sector and develop them.
The authors reason that a nation's traditions and culture depends on the major cities in the country is an arrant nonsense and his claim that the financial support must be provided to the cities in order for the nations traditions to thrive no longer stands.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 62, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
...son clearly lean towards the fact that, a nations cultural traditions are preserved and g...
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Line 1, column 201, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...neration. It is true that majority of a nations population live in the cities nowadays,...
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Line 3, column 1027, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ss, relating to the defeat of the evil. Hence many such misconceptions by the people ...
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Line 3, column 1206, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ms and rituals that are to be followed. Hence the reason for the claim that the citie...
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Line 3, column 1264, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...or the claim that the cities preserve a nations tradition doesnt exactly qualify. Fu...
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Line 3, column 1282, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...the cities preserve a nations tradition doesnt exactly qualify. Furthermore, it is ...
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Line 5, column 765, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...e people pertaining to the rural areas. Hence diverting the money completely toward t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, hence, if, regarding, so, as to, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2453.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 514.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77237354086 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68394292737 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.412451361868 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 786.6 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.8472530983 60.3974514979 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.277777778 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5555555556 23.4991977007 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27777777778 5.21951772744 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328721017428 0.243740707755 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109172912366 0.0831039109588 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108580466147 0.0758088955206 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255513509503 0.150359130593 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109356654805 0.0667264976115 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.8971910112 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.