The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities. "Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years in Palm City, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff for all our pest control services."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The Vice –president of the food distribution company has recommended to go back from Fly-Away to Buzzoff Pest control in the city of Palm. His decision is mainly based on the higher food looses seen in the ware house where Fly-Away was employed, as considered to Buzzoff. However, before this argument is completely validated, three questions must be evaluated.
To begin with, while making the comparisons between the loss in the food stuff, is the vice-president evaluating every possible aspects? It is possible that the loss of $20,000 food stuff in ware house of Palm city belonged to a total whole of 10 million dollars, whereas, in Wintervale the total value of stored grain was only $ 90,000. Then under this circumstances, the economic loss of food grain in Palm city is not more than that of Wintervale, and this may weaken the Vice-presidents argument. Additonally, it is possible that the food stuff stored in Palm ware house belonged to easily perishable types and irrespective of the pest control services employed in the scene, the food loss was inevitable. If, either of this scenario has merit, then conclusion drawn in the original argument is weakened.
Secondly, what if the climate and geography of the two cities are completely different? The vice-president assumes that the only cause of higher loss in Palm city was due to the fecklessness of Fly-Away service. It is possible that Palm city, falls in a moderately warm, temperate climate; a climate that encourages rampant growth of harmful pest organisms and faster withering if the stored grains, which then attracts more pest. On the other hand, Wintervale, lies in a frigid climate zone, where the attack of pest species is very sporadic. The rate of pest virulence may not depend on the work of the pest control services, but the climate and temperature of their foraging ground. In such conditions, the vice-presidents argument does not hold water.
Thirdly, what if Fly-Away pest control service had no role in the deleterious loss of stored food grains? It may be possible that the ware house of Palm city underwent massive damages in the year, in which it was handed over to Fly-Away pest control. The seedy, dilapidated conditions of the ware house created such a favourable breeding ground for the damaging pest, that no matter which pest service company was used, their efforts to prevent economic food loss would have been futile. Also, it is possible that the pest attacking the Palm city ware house became resistant to the pesticides, in the one the one year period. This could have resulted similar debacles, in the use of any pest control services. The validity of either of this scenario, significantly weakens the vice-president argument.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on many unwarranted assumptions. To increase the credibility of his assertion, the Vice-president should conduct a more conscientious research and answer the above three questions, in order to, return to his desired pest control service- Buzzoff.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 504 350
No. of Characters: 2497 1500
No. of Different Words: 229 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.738 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.954 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.769 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 174 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.909 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.224 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.591 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.334 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.525 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.076 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 58, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommended going', 'recommended gonna'.
Suggestion: recommended going; recommended gonna
...nt of the food distribution company has recommended to go back from Fly-Away to Buzzoff Pest cont...
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Line 3, column 327, Rule ID: CURRENCY_SPACE[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: '$90'.
Suggestion: $90
...he total value of stored grain was only $ 90,000. Then under this circumstances, the...
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Line 3, column 348, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...red grain was only $ 90,000. Then under this circumstances, the economic loss of foo...
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Line 7, column 598, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'the one'.
Suggestion: the one
... became resistant to the pesticides, in the one the one year period. This could have resulted s...
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Line 9, column 338, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... desired pest control service- Buzzoff.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, whereas, while, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2576.0 2260.96107784 114% => OK
No of words: 504.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11111111111 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88232361688 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 204.123752495 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482142857143 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 800.1 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.22255489022 261% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4988473109 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.090909091 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9090909091 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.18181818182 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283773375268 0.218282227539 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0928833435359 0.0743258471296 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0843065236531 0.0701772020484 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173906005619 0.128457276422 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0567228745042 0.0628817314937 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 98.500998004 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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