The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities.
"Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff for all our pest control services."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
While the plan of the food distribution president seemed auspicious, the argument presented does not actually prove the case. The argument suffers from poor logical statements, lack of quantification, use of extreme word and rest on unfounded assumption which tends to compromise it's conclusion.
The author assumed that the Fly-away pest company started work immediately after signing the contract. This assumption is not pertinent because there is no evidence that showed immediate resumption by Fly-away company. is there any proof that shoes that the Fly-away pest control company work in the palm city warehouse? However, there is no evidence to support it. A contract can be signed to begin in 6 months or a year time, it is not necessary that it will have immediate effect. In order make this argument plausible, the author needs to provide evidence that showed that the Fly-away pest control company really did work in the warehouse.
Also, the author claimed that last month food worth over $20,000 were destroyed by pest after the Fly-away pest control company must have worked in the warehouse. Just because foods were destroyed during the time a contract was given to fly-away company doesn't mean that their pest control skills is not effective or that they are responsible for the damage made. Furthermore, there is no evidence that truly show that the stored food was destroyed by the pest. It could be falsely reported to the vice president to be damaged by pest. The damage could be as a result of other factors such as , poor storage temperature, poor maintenance or ventilation of the warehouse that destroyed the stored food. It could also be as a result of environmental factors, like in a rainy areas , it rained and much water or flood entered the warehouse and wasted the food. The author needs to investigate other factors that might have lead to the destruction of the stored food to make the argument sound.
The argument was further worsened when the author claimed that Buzzoff Pest control company is the best means of the food distribution company to save money. Best in the whole country? The vice president just compared two company and concluded that one is the best. In addition to this, losing $10,000 worth of food in a month contradicts the author claim that Buzzoff Pest control company is actually the best.
Finally, this argument lack quantification. The author claimed that , though the price of service charged by the Buzzoff Pest control company is higher than the service price of fly-away pest control company, that the best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff services. What is the service charge of the Buzzoff Pest control company and fly-away pest control company? The service price of Fly-away company might be higher than Buzzoff company service price by a cent or a dollar. There is no much difference here. Furthermore, if the total worth of goods in the warehouse is $30,000 , and the service charge of Buzzoff company is $25,000 and plus the $10,000 worth of food lost totaling $35,000. It can be seen that the food distribution company is experiencing losses and not profit. Therefore, to validate this claim the author needs to quantify the service charges of both Buzzoff and Fly-away pest control company.
Though the conclusion reached by the vice president of the food control company seemed favourable, however the argument was flawed because the author failed to consider other factors that could have destroyed the stored food. Also, the argument made use of extreme word, illogical statements, lack quantification and was based on unjustified assumption which serve to jeopardize the conclusion. Therefore, in order to make this argument hard, the author needs to investigate various factors that might have destroyed the stored food, provide evidence that Fly-away pest control company started work immediately after signing the contract and also provide evidence that showed that Buzzoff is actually the best option for the food distribution company by quantifying the service charge of both Fly-away and Buzzoff pest control company.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 29 15
No. of Words: 674 350
No. of Characters: 3370 1500
No. of Different Words: 233 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.095 4.7
Average Word Length: 5 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.539 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 255 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 200 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 108 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.241 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.291 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.483 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.345 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 135, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ntract. This assumption is not pertinent , is there any proof that shoes that the ...
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Line 3, column 252, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... contract was given to fly-away company doesnt mean that their pest control skills is ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 590, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... be as a result of other factors such as , poor storage temperature, poor maintena...
^^
Line 3, column 771, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'area'?
Suggestion: area
... environmental factors, like in a rainy areas , it rained and much water or flood ent...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 776, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ronmental factors, like in a rainy areas , it rained and much water or flood enter...
^^
Line 5, column 67, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... quantification. The author claimed that , though the price of service charged by ...
^^
Line 5, column 498, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...e price by a cent or a dollar. There is no much difference here. Furthermore, if t...
^^
Line 5, column 589, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...worth of goods in the warehouse is 0,000 , and the service charge of Buzzoff compa...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, furthermore, however, if, really, so, therefore, while, in addition, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.6327345309 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 27.0 13.6137724551 198% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 16.3942115768 177% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3359.0 2260.96107784 149% => OK
No of words: 661.0 441.139720559 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08169440242 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.07049507093 4.56307096286 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61390884623 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 204.123752495 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.361573373676 0.468620217663 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1022.4 705.55239521 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.6515586836 57.8364921388 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.827586207 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7931034483 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.10344827586 5.70786347227 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 6.88822355289 232% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.43367177749 0.218282227539 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138223172443 0.0743258471296 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100543551488 0.0701772020484 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256106596324 0.128457276422 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0804588705536 0.0628817314937 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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