The following appeared in a memo from the Vice President of the food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities.
"Recently, we signed a contract with Fly-away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years in Palm City, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. This difference in Pest damage is best explained by the negligence of Fly-Away."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
In the given argument the author scrutinizes the work of Fly-away Pest Control Company by comparing it with that of the work of Buzzoff Pest Control Company. The author holds the negligence of the Fly-Away Pest Control Company responsible for greater damage caused at their warehouse in Palm City as compared to their other warehouse in Wintervale. The author attempts to prove his contention by providing the statistics of damage of food by Pests at two the different Locations mentioned previously.
The author takes the help of the statistics of the damaged food by Pests at the two different warehouses. And lands over a conclusion that the warehouse with the least damage has been provided with the best service from the Pest control company. It is possible that the warehouse with less food damage might be smaller than the other. Thus, the food stored there might be less as compared to the other warehouse ultimately leading to lesser damage. It is also possible that one warehouse is having proper cleaning of it at regular intervals. Thus, limiting the growth of the Pests and managing the food damage. Similarly, there are many other reasons which are responsible for the damage to food. Thus, it will be incorrect to blame the Pest Control Company for it.
The author further adds on to his argument by providing the statistics of the damage of food by pests in terms of money. Here the author doesn’t mention the food types stored in both the warehouses. It is possible that in the warehouse at Palm City more expensive foodstuff is stored than the warehouse in Wintervale. Thus, even though the damage in terms of quantity might be the same, but in terms of money the damage of food at Palm city warehouse will always be more than that of the warehouse at Wintervale. Thus, the author needs to provide additional information in order to avoid various alternative explanations for his theory.
The author also needs to give information about the probability of the food items to be prone to Pests damage. As it is possible that the food stored at Palm city warehouse is more prone to pests’ damage than the food stored at Wintervale. Thus, whichever Pest control company whether it be Fly-away or Buzzoff, can't help. As Pest control will try to limit the damage, but that can't completely stop it. Thus, if this was the case then the warehouse at Palm City will always have more food damage as compared to the warehouse at Wintervale.
Although the statistics of food damage by Pests do support the author’s conclusion that it was the negligence of the Fly-Away company that caused more food damage at the Palm City warehouse than the warehouse at Wintervale. On the flip side, several alternative explanations could be interpreted from the author’s generalizations like those mentioned above which tend to weaken his argument.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 484 350
No. of Characters: 2320 1500
No. of Different Words: 170 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.69 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.793 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.581 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.043 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.906 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.478 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.381 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.526 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.142 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ferent Locations mentioned previously. The author takes the help of the statistics...
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Line 2, column 377, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...us, the food stored there might be less as compared to the other warehouse ultimat...
^^
Line 4, column 111, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...food items to be prone to Pests damage. As it is possible that the food stored at ...
^^
Line 4, column 312, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...pany whether it be Fly-away or Buzzoff, cant help. As Pest control will try to limit...
^^^^
Line 4, column 378, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... will try to limit the damage, but that cant completely stop it. Thus, if this was t...
^^^^
Line 4, column 540, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ompared to the warehouse at Wintervale. Although the statistics of food damage by Pests ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, similarly, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2371.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 483.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90890269151 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65861727668 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.349896480331 0.468620217663 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 752.4 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8699941285 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.086956522 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.73913043478 5.70786347227 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 6.88822355289 247% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0660601224439 0.218282227539 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0289994471894 0.0743258471296 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463930485662 0.0701772020484 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0543505874737 0.128457276422 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0379530349145 0.0628817314937 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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