The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of a large, highly diversified company.
"Ten years ago our company had two new office buildings constructed as regional headquarters for two different regions. The buildings were erected by two different construction companies—Alpha and Zeta. Even though the two buildings had identical floor plans, the building constructed by Zeta cost 30 percent more to build, and its expenses for maintenance last year were twice those of the building constructed by Alpha. Furthermore, the energy consumption of the Zeta building has been higher than that of the Alpha building every year since its construction. Such data, plus the fact that Alpha has a stable workforce with little employee turnover, indicate that we should use Alpha rather than Zeta for our contemplated new building project."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The memo from the vice president of a largely diversified company contemplates to give the new building project to Alpha Construction company rather than Zeta, as the latter has charged 30 percent more for the construction of the similar building with same floor plan. Also the expenses related to maintenance and energy consumption were higher in Zeta building as compared to Alpha building. Though the argument seems logical at first glance but, the argument stated in this way has several key factors which has been assumed to reach an obscure conclusion. Therefore the argument is rather weak and has various assumption which has been accepted conveniently.
First, the vice president has very easily assumed that the buildings constructed in two different regions have exactly the same set of conditions and circumstances to go through. The two different regions could have completely different requirements to manage as the regions could be in different states of the country. Now for example in a country like India the states in south contrast to the states in Northern India have different rates per unit of electricity consumed. They have also varied minimum wages for labour, which are the foundations of construction industry. Thence this comparison becomes unreliable and un warranted if these set of conditions are not perused.
Secondly, the argument has assumed the two buildings to be similar on the basis of its floor plan. Yes its true the floor plan maybe same for the two buildings constructed but beside the floor plan there are diverse categories and varieties in which the two buildings could be different. One of which could be whether both the headquarters are fitted with facility of lift. In exactly the same category is this facility provided a redundancy in both the constructions or not. On the whole it is very difficult to predict if the two buildings are exactly similar.
Thirdly, the cost of zeta building is 30 percent more than alpha building. This assumption is proportional to various factors related to constructional material used in the building. Their could be two cases-either the zeta building has used a superior quality of products for the same purpose or the cost of the raw materials is higher in the region where zeta construction company is based. Therefore it is necessary to determine this vague claim before taking the further actions.
And finally the maintenance and energy consumption of the zeta building is high. In effect to this the assumption depends on what kind of facilities is provided in the two buildings. Zeta building maybe fitted with individual ac units as compared to centralized air conditioning in the alpha building which has a lower consumption of power. Also the maintenance cost for maintaining the centralized air conditioning systems is much higher than the individual ac units. On the contrary this maybe in favour of alpha construction company which has devised prescient plans keeping in mind of the future fiscal concerns.
Therefore, for the aforementioned assumptions which the vice president in his memo has accepted should carefully examine the empirical data of both the construction companies and furthermore compare the two different regions to illustrate and manifest a clear vision as to which company in most suitable for this purpose. Moreover these the argument claims on the data which is ten years old. As a result the effects which are connected to inflation in this ten years must also be taken into account before reacing the final conclusion to this project.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: As a result the effects which are connected to inflation in this ten years must also be taken into account before reacing the final conclusion to this project.
Error: reacing Suggestion: reading
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK
argument 4 -- OK
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flaws:
some arguneats are duplicated. need to consider more reasons like: time, people, events...
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 580 350
No. of Characters: 2945 1500
No. of Different Words: 249 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.907 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.078 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.834 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 213 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 179 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 120 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 81 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.308 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.47 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.731 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.29 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.533 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 270, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... similar building with same floor plan. Also the expenses related to maintenance and...
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Line 2, column 560, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...assumed to reach an obscure conclusion. Therefore the argument is rather weak and has var...
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Line 8, column 394, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ere zeta construction company is based. Therefore it is necessary to determine this vague...
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Line 10, column 130, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t to this the assumption depends on what kind of facilities is provided in the tw...
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Line 10, column 343, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...which has a lower consumption of power. Also the maintenance cost for maintaining th...
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Line 12, column 323, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...pany in most suitable for this purpose. Moreover these the argument claims on the data w...
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Line 12, column 375, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...se the argument claims on the data which is ten years old. As a result the effect...
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Line 12, column 395, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ms on the data which is ten years old. As a result the effects which are connecte...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, as to, for example, kind of, as a result, on the contrary, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 55.5748502994 133% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3004.0 2260.96107784 133% => OK
No of words: 580.0 441.139720559 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17931034483 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90746259869 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87243449096 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 204.123752495 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.436206896552 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 933.3 705.55239521 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0872386827 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.538461538 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3076923077 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38461538462 5.70786347227 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314504153901 0.218282227539 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869593288569 0.0743258471296 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795189168175 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168692764441 0.128457276422 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395405928689 0.0628817314937 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 98.500998004 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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