The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of a large, highly diversified company.
"Ten years ago our company had two new office buildings constructed as regional headquarters for two regions. The buildings were erected by different construction companies — Alpha and Zeta. Although the two buildings had identical floor plans, the building constructed by Zeta cost 30 percent more to build. However, that building's expenses for maintenance last year were only half those of Alpha's. In addition, the energy consumption of the Zeta building has been lower than that of the Alpha building every year since its construction. Given these data, plus the fact that Zeta has a stable workforce with little employee turnover, we recommend using Zeta rather than Alpha for our new building project, even though Alpha's bid promises lower construction costs."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation
In a memo from vice president of a large, highly diversified company it is recommend using Zeta rather than Alpha for construction of new building project. For supporting a recommendation, president uses a data of last year regarding maintenance cost and power consumption on by two different building. Before, considering a recommendation of memo by president following three question need to be answered.
Firstly, Is the premises or surrounding of both the building same? In other words, is both the building is located in some industrial area or one is located in resident area and other is surrounded by chemical factory? Consider, if the one building is located in location where cost of raw material for building is low and other building is located in some remote location where raw material for building is not available easily. Further, due to remote location of one building additional transportation charges will be added to cost of that building. If this different in location case is true than comparison of cost of construction and other cost comparison will not be hold water.
Secondly, Is time difference is considered during recommendation? In other words, for recommendation reference is taken for the building which constructed 10 years ago, Is impact of this 10 year is considered on various factor of two construction company Zeta and Alpha. Consider working culture is changed over this 10 year for both the company. If Earlier working workforce for Alpha was not as stable as it is today, then Alpha can perform better than its earlier project. Also, if in last 10 year Alpha has made good relation in raw material market due to which they can provide better raw material and enhanced performance of construction. If either of case is true that it will weaken the recommendation of memo by president of company.
Last but not the least, Is data available with Mr. president is correct and sufficient? No evidence is given by author regarding the authenticity of data used for comparison of performance of two building. It may be possible that data available is not correct. Also, Data used for the comparison of performance of two building is only of last year. Considering available data is correct, it may be possible that performance of building constructed by Alpha has a better performance for nine year and only for last year building constructed by Zeta performed better. If either of possibility is true and it will weaken the recommendation of president.
In conclusion, the recommendation as it stand as flaw as it is reliance on some unstated assumption. If author is able to answer the above question provided the evidence for authenticity of available data, data for complete last 10-year, effect of changes on both the company over last 10 years and condition of location of both the building then we can confirm validity of recommendation by president.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 479 350
No. of Characters: 2370 1500
No. of Different Words: 179 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.678 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.948 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.018 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 164 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 141 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 111 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 66 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.773 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.904 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.321 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.537 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 76, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'recommended'.
Suggestion: recommended
...large, highly diversified company it is recommend using Zeta rather than Alpha for constr...
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Line 1, column 304, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nsumption on by two different building. Before, considering a recommendation of memo b...
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Line 3, column 265, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'Alpha' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'Alphas'.
Suggestion: Alphas
...or of two construction company Zeta and Alpha. Consider working culture is changed ov...
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Line 3, column 646, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d enhanced performance of construction. If either of case is true that it will wea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 35.0 16.3942115768 213% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2423.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 479.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05845511482 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08763115022 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.382045929019 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 771.3 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.2332725629 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.136363636 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7727272727 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72727272727 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263553901366 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.086506898446 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0815104269856 0.0701772020484 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168585609371 0.128457276422 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0856634779323 0.0628817314937 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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