Unfortunately, in contemporary society, creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The claim states that creating an appealing image in the contemporary society has become more important than reality or truth behind that image. According to Japanese theory a person has three faces-one which everybody sees it as a whole, the second face which is only visible to his close friends, family and relatives and the third face which nobody can see except the person himself. In effect to this theory the third face is the actual truth or reality behind his image and first face is the appealing image which the claim states to be. However, to be fair only a fraction of this third face is visible in the appealing image of that person.
Considering the example of the film industry where actors and actresses has to maintain a certain code of image in the public sphere. One of the main reason is that there actions and comments can have a tremendous effect on public community as a whole. Even though they appear to be content and present a smiling face to the world, the statistics and evidence show that they go through several psychological problems in reality. Problems of drug abuse, alcohol addiction and depression have been present in the industry from the primitive ages of this glamour world. Therefore the truth is pretty much overshadowed with what they face and what they appear to be.
In contrast to this a teacher or a guru is always a person who is ascetic and pure providing the best route to his pupils in gain of their overall development. He or she is a person who learning from his mistakes correct his protégé not to repeat his errors, completely eradicating the sham people generally appear to be. One cannot deny that even in this field, we have teachers who are immoral and reactionary to the principles of shikhas’.
But to summarize as a whole we have also a percentage of people from film industry who present completely true image and are fastidious to their profession. We have all kinds of people in every aspect and a lot is changed from the judgement and perception from the third party. Ultimately a very small faction of people are appealing the true reality behind their inner image in contrast to those who imposter their first face as their third.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
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Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a imposter'.
Suggestion: who is a imposter
... their inner image in contrast to those who imposter their first face as their third.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, second, so, therefore, third, as to, in contrast, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1832.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 386.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74611398964 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54264284128 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476683937824 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.0087570422 60.3974514979 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 122.133333333 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7333333333 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06666666667 5.21951772744 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150170278229 0.243740707755 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593711053138 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105378742351 0.0758088955206 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0807271845802 0.150359130593 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0978828078185 0.0667264976115 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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