The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.“During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that signifcant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep.”
Comparing the Quoit manufacturing with the nearby Panoply industry is actually a very good thing to do. It means the Quoit are checking out for the progress rate. However the assumption made by the vice president of the Quoit manufacturing industry can be further strengthened or weakend if the points listed below is well considered
The argument stated that they quit manufacturing had 30% more on jobs accidents done the panoply industry. However the assumption is not representative enough. Comparison should be made with several other industries in order to further strengthen the assumption made. It could be that the panoply industry had covered up the real number to protect the integrity of their industry. Relying on their number will therefore weaken the options made.
Aside from not being representative, assuming that reduction of work shift hours will bring about lesser accident might not be totally true. Further investigations has to be made on the workers to know if they are battling with personal issues that causes distractions while working. It could even be that the salary been paid does not do proper Justice to the expenditure and this makes them give less of their best to what they do, there by, increasing on job accident rates.
In addition to the above stated points, assuming that a one-hour reduction in the work shifts will bring about adequate amount of sleep will be for the weakend if the employees don't eventually get to sleep. Some may see it as an opportunity to take on more menial jobs to boost their income. So may take it as a time to chat and visit with friends. Therefore, the assumptions will only be warranted if there is a way of ensuring that the extra one hour provided will be added to their sleeping hours.
Reducing the number of job hours might not necessarily increase productivity. Assuming this will be unwarranted for if they on job accident is not the cause of the present level of productivity of the company. Other investigations has to be made to know the other things that has not allowed for increased productivity. it could be due to wear out of the machines used for storage conditions and so many other reasons.
Finally, concluding that the reduction in the shift hours would bring about an increased productivity and a reduction in the number of her job as dense will be proven warranted if the industry can further investigate the personal lives of the employees compared their results with many other industries with similar working conditions check out for other reasons why the productivity may not be increasing.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 438 350
No. of Characters: 2121 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.575 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.842 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.767 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.053 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.308 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.288 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.573 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.081 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 164, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...are checking out for the progress rate. However the assumption made by the vice preside...
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Line 3, column 108, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...bs accidents done the panoply industry. However the assumption is not representative en...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 178, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ill be for the weakend if the employees dont eventually get to sleep. Some may see i...
^^^^
Line 9, column 321, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...not allowed for increased productivity. it could be due to wear out of the machine...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, while, as to, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2167.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 437.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95881006865 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80515040047 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478260869565 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.1644002459 57.8364921388 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.052631579 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68421052632 5.70786347227 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14236752899 0.218282227539 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0477795111549 0.0743258471296 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0560405647112 0.0701772020484 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0853365801876 0.128457276422 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348589810982 0.0628817314937 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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