The following appeared on the Mozart School of Music Web site.
"The Mozart School of Music should be the first choice for parents considering enrolling their child in music lessons. First of all, the Mozart School welcomes youngsters at all ability and age levels; there is no audition to attend the school. Second, the school offers instruction in nearly all musical instruments as well a wide range of styles and genres from classical to rock. Third, the faculty includes some of the most distinguished musicians in the area. Finally, many Mozart graduates have gone on to become well-known and highly paid professional musicians."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument represents some of the factors for which students must join the mozart music school.This memorandum distorts the view of the situation by manipulating facts and provides dubious pieces of evidence.However, scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little credible support and the argument it presents to validate the conclusion is flawed.let me address them one by one.
First of all, the argument unsubstantially assumes that, all kinds of youngers can join a school without giving an audition must be a reason for choosing this school which is merely a supposition without solid ground.For example, if all kinds of students can join there, that means any notorious,vicious, or malevolent student can also join there which makes the school environment a vile place rather than an edible one.If this is the factor that makes the deteriorates the quality of the environment then there is no reason to choose Mozart school upon others only because it doesn't need any audition.
Furthermore, The memorandum superficially claims that, prominent musitians are in the faculty position indicate the quality of the teaching in any school.Nevertheless, many eminent musicians may not be a good instructor as they have to handle many other programs rather than only training,so it can not be implausible that some non eminent musicians can have a supreme skill in teaching because they must have more time to manage the lackings the students.Ostensibly, this can be caused that only having good fame cannot make one's a good teacher.
Finally,school websites present that many mozart graduates have become well known and successful in their profession.Purportedly, many graduates don't mean all graduates, or number of the successful percentage it fails to provide.If many students mean 100 thousand students enroll in mozart every year and 1 thousand students become consummate in their field which is only 1% of the total enrolled students.
In conclusion, if the school website takes into account the fallacies mention above ,it may able to make a well-informed decision about considering Mozart school above others and bolsters its argument with lucid concrete evidence.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 356 350
No. of Characters: 1807 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.344 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.076 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.697 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 50.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 27.482 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.434 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.817 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.078 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 25, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
The argument represents some of the factors for which students must join th...
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Line 2, column 98, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...dents must join the mozart music school.This memorandum distorts the view of the sit...
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Line 2, column 211, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...and provides dubious pieces of evidence.However, scrutiny of the evidence reveals that ...
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Line 4, column 218, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...rely a supposition without solid ground.For example, if all kinds of students can j...
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Line 4, column 296, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , vicious
...can join there, that means any notorious,vicious, or malevolent student can also join th...
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Line 4, column 422, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
... a vile place rather than an edible one.If this is the factor that makes the deter...
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Line 4, column 579, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...zart school upon others only because it doesnt need any audition. Furthermore, The...
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Line 4, column 590, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... upon others only because it doesnt need any audition. Furthermore, The memora...
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Line 6, column 155, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Nevertheless
...e quality of the teaching in any school.Nevertheless, many eminent musicians may not be a go...
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Line 6, column 289, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , so
...other programs rather than only training,so it can not be implausible that some non...
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Line 6, column 400, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a supreme skill in teaching because they must have more time to manage the lackin...
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Line 6, column 458, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Ostensibly
...ime to manage the lackings the students.Ostensibly, this can be caused that only having go...
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Line 8, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , school
...not make ones a good teacher. Finally,school websites present that many mozart gradu...
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Line 8, column 118, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Purportedly
...nown and successful in their profession.Purportedly, many graduates dont mean all graduates...
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Line 8, column 146, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... profession.Purportedly, many graduates dont mean all graduates, or number of the su...
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Line 8, column 230, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...ccessful percentage it fails to provide.If many students mean 100 thousand student...
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Line 10, column 84, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...into account the fallacies mention above ,it may able to make a well-informed deci...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, well, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1855.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 343.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40816326531 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2471590696 2.78398813304 117% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556851311953 0.468620217663 119% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 68.0 22.8473053892 298% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 131.145110469 57.8364921388 227% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 371.0 119.503703932 310% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 68.6 23.324526521 294% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 24.6 5.70786347227 431% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23620204413 0.218282227539 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123992809777 0.0743258471296 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479485549013 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123992809777 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0479485549013 0.0628817314937 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 38.4 14.3799401198 267% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -6.0 48.3550499002 -12% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 31.0 12.197005988 254% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.28 12.5979740519 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.34 8.32208582834 136% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 12.3882235529 226% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 29.2 11.1389221557 262% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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