Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible Other young adults prefer to live with their family for a longer time Which of these solutions do you think is better Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their family for a longer time. Which of these solutions do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Young adult before starting the next phase of their life sometimes takes some risky decision whether to live with their parents or not. Personally, I believe that it'll be a fruitful decision for young individuals to live with their parents within a long period of time. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.

First of all, living with their parents make their family bonding much stronger that helps their progenitor learning family bondage. It's our moral duty to take care of my parents when they are becoming old. By living with them we can easily take care of them. Moreover, our children also learn about this quality from ourselves. In fact, If anyone has been involved in helping out their parents in their bad time, their posterity also learns this trait from them. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was child, I lived with my grandparents. I saw my father helping them in different ways such as taking them for health check-up when need, outing with them at weekend. If we leave them, they have to do everything all their own. Moreover, It'll also be hard for them to live without us because of the loneliness attack most at that age. My grandparents had lived with us before they died. I grow up in this co-operative family environment, so I also attain this trait. As a result, I never left my father which I personally learn from him.

Secondly, living alone at a very young age is not so easy because of initial career with low income and some new challenges. Naturally, job challenges are very high at a very young age. Freshers suffer much because of the new environment and low amount of payment. In fact, with this low income, it is hard to maintain every need. For instance, about 10 years ago, one of my uncles wanted to live independently after graduation from college. But it was very hard for him to maintain daily necessities at that time. As a result, after getting married he returned to our grandparent's place because with his income he could not live himself properly let alone with his wife. Moreover, he couldn't do some extra job because of the excessive pressure and work load as a fresher in his industry.

In conclusion, I am of the opinion that it is beneficial for an adult to live with their parents. This is because of the family bonding and because of higher job challenges at early age.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 255, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...o live with their parents within a long period of time. I feel this way for two reasons which ...
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Line 3, column 134, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...eir progenitor learning family bondage. Its our moral duty to take care of my paren...
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Line 5, column 686, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...y let alone with his wife. Moreover, he couldnt do some extra job because of the excess...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1974.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6338028169 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49023750158 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516431924883 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.7631769237 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.9230769231 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3846153846 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15384615385 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288352402547 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815393420699 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731102121022 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197286268924 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0695928494017 0.0645574589148 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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