"The following appeared in a newsletter offering advice to investors:
"Techcorporation is our top pick for investment this term. We urge all of our clients to invest in this new company. For the first time in ten years, a company that has developed satellite technology has been approved by the FTA to compete with the current satellite provider. That company is Techcorporation. A consumer survey last year indicated that over 80 percent of respondents were dissatisfied with the current satellite provider & would want to switch to another provider if the industry were not a monopoly. Thus, the new venture of Techcorporation into satellite television will prove to be highly profitable for those who invest now."" -
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the advice & the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the advice.
Today, having a conversation with a person on the other side of the globe is simple to an extent where 200 years ago, it would have been difficult to even imagine; could you imagine video calls between people - continents apart, without digital computers and the Internet? Our world has become global village now, as i would like to call it.
The advent of communication technologies has made it possible to know what's happening around the entire world, in just few mouse clicks! Satellite communication is being used by television providers for better picture and sound quality for the new HDTV's. Also, the internet has allowed us to participate in the global share market, where we can invest into any company we would like to invest into, and track live stock market data at any time.
The author mentions that the company "Techcorporation" is urging its clients to invest in the company, by placing this ad-like statement. Any careful investor will think before investing in this firm given the validity of the claims. The firm claims that it has received the FTA approval for the first time in 10 years. It doesn't state why other companies may have failed to get an approval from the FTA. Could it be the case, where other companies don't stand a chance against the currently leading company in spite of its poor reception(pun intended) by the public?
Secondly, with such sparse information mentioned in the claim as this, people will definitely feel risked for investing in this company as there is no mention of the current CEO, turnover or any statistical data which can attract potential investors.
The author also states that 80% of the users of the currently leading satellite provider are unhappy with the service. Had they given a more descriptive survey, getting responses from a large number of people, spanning across various regions and provided their original opinion in the claim, their argument would have been stronger.
All in all, very less information was provided, as we saw in the author's writing, to make the investors feel confident enough to invest in Techcorporation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 318, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...world has become global village now, as i would like to call it. The advent o...
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Line 3, column 71, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
...chnologies has made it possible to know whats happening around the entire world, in j...
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Line 5, column 334, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...oval for the first time in 10 years. It doesnt state why other companies may have fail...
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Line 5, column 460, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...d it be the case, where other companies dont stand a chance against the currently le...
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Line 9, column 185, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...criptive survey, getting responses from a large number of people, spanning across various regions...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'in spite of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.239185750636 0.25644967241 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.167938931298 0.15541462614 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0839694656489 0.0836205057962 100% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0356234096692 0.0520304965353 68% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0432569974555 0.0272364105082 159% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.124681933842 0.125424944231 99% => OK
Participles: 0.0636132315522 0.0416121511921 153% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.82526945069 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0254452926209 0.026700313972 95% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.119592875318 0.113004496875 106% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0254452926209 0.0255425247493 100% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0127226463104 0.0127820249294 100% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2118.0 2731.13054187 78% => OK
No of words: 352.0 446.07635468 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.01704545455 6.12365571057 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.57801047555 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.366477272727 0.378187486979 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.258522727273 0.287650121315 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.161931818182 0.208842608468 78% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.107954545455 0.135150697306 80% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82526945069 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 207.018472906 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630681818182 0.469332199767 134% => OK
Word variations: 77.4840324245 52.1807786196 148% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.039408867 70% => OK
Sentence length: 25.1428571429 23.2022227129 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.4257007086 57.7814097925 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.285714286 141.986410481 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1428571429 23.2022227129 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.571428571429 0.724660767414 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.58251231527 140% => OK
Readability: 50.9951298701 51.9672348444 98% => OK
Elegance: 1.73195876289 1.8405768891 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.456535369006 0.441005458295 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.112082034265 0.135418324435 83% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0573650761873 0.0829849096947 69% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.66044620964 0.58762219726 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.181669712879 0.147661913831 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.186518201689 0.193483328276 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0947096590545 0.0970749176394 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.250407124531 0.42659136922 59% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0779845010595 0.0774707102158 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2550829092 0.312017818177 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0869290725325 0.0698173142475 125% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 5.36822660099 75% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 14.657635468 89% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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