The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms(. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The article in the business magazine suggests that a business will prosper only if those people are hired who needs less than six hours of sleep per night. The author has come to this conclusion based on the recent study of the average hours of sleep of 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives and the success of their firms. However, before this argument can be suggested, two questions must be answered.
Firstly, just based on the survey of a few firms, can it be generalized for all the other firms? While it might be true, that the people sleeping less in the studied group might be performing well, but it might not necessarily be true that their better performance was just because they sleep less. It might be possible that the firms which had more success were because they only hire hard-working and diligent employees such that less sleep has minimal effect on their performance as compared to the other firms. It might also be possible that the employees who showed better performance with less sleep might already be familiar with working in this type of situation as they might have to do arduous work for the firm they work such that they might already have the habit of sleeping fewer hours before the survey was even conducted. If either of the scenarios shown has merit, then the conclusion drawn in the argument is significantly weakened.
Secondly, does the higher profit margin and higher growth of the firms be solely because they have less sleeping employees? It might be possible that the working environment of the firms which showed success be more suitable the other firms such that the employees working there remain motivated working diligently for the firm. For example, the cooperation between the manager and the staffs might be good enabling harmonious working conditions in the firm which eventually help in the faster growth of the firm. If the above is true, the claim that firms make faster growth solely because their employees sleep not more than six hours is flawed.
In conclusion, the argument as of now is based on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author can provide pieces of evidence probably in the form of systematic research and answer the above-raised questions, then it will be possible to determine whether the suggestion for hiring only those people who sleep not more than six hours for the success of the firm holds water
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 407 350
No. of Characters: 1959 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.492 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.813 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.416 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.071 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.561 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.377 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.572 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.087 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 335, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...people who sleep not more than six hours for the success of the firm holds water ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2005.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 407.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92628992629 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46977271016 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.439803439803 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 593.1 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.2609461696 57.8364921388 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.214285714 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0714285714 23.324526521 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64285714286 5.70786347227 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122707730776 0.218282227539 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542042121925 0.0743258471296 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07597792938 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0985747540033 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0925896036965 0.0628817314937 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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