The following appeared as a recommendation by a committee planning a ten-year budget for the city of Calatrava.
"The birthrate in our city is declining: in fact, last year's birthrate was only one-half that of five years ago. Thus the number of students enrolled in our public schools will soon decrease dramatically, and we can safely reduce the funds budgeted for education during the next decade. At the same time, we can reduce funding for athletic playing fields and other recreational facilities. As a result, we will have sufficient money to fund city facilities and programs used primarily by adults, since we can expect the adult population of the city to increase."
The argument states that, the city named Calatrava have sufficient money to fund city facilities and programs used primarily by adults , as they expect the adult population will be increased according to the report on city birthrate is declining. Stated in this way the argument have missed several important factor on which the argument will be evaluated. The conclusion on this argument depends on evidence that is not crystal. Hence, the argument is incomplete, flawed and somewhat capricious.
Firstly, the argument implies that, the birthrate is declining according to the last year birth records. The sense behind this statement is unconvincing. Because there are other reason would have factors behind this result. For instance, In Bangladesh a city reported their previous earning is nugatory in comparison with five year records and later they found due to sudden economic disaster their earning were that result. This point would have been convincing, if it provides another reason behind slow birth rate.
Secondly, the argument assume that, as slow birth rate, the number of students enrollment will be slowed. This statement is limited and parochial manner, because it provides no convincing records, statistical date behind this statement. For instance, a business firm sudden product loss would reasoned for their poor authoritative management, but later found that this is not true, rather the employee faults were the reason behind sudden upheaval. The statement could have been convincing, if they provide any references, data, proof.
Thirdly, the argument claims that, the committee safely reduced their budget behind athletic and recreational facilities. But they did not provide any previous picture of cost on these sides. Then, how could they defined their statement is valid and solid to agree. For example, a tech firm published a records of earning and conclude that they had forty percent more earning than previous earning, but it omitted their previous year earning record. After that, it divulge that, their statement is flawed. The point would have been strengthened, if they provide previous year records.
Posing several questions unanswered, the argument left someone in a state of confusion and forced to conclude that, the authors is a merely daydreamer than following crystal, convincing and pragmatic approaches.
In conclusion, the argument is failed because it did not provide convincing answer from birthrate declining to slow enrollment and previous year records regarding the cost of athletes and recreational facilities. The basic and foremost criteria for any argument is to provide compelling and convincing data. On this criteria, the argument is flawed, incomplete and unconvincing to attract any discreet reader attention.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 426 350
No. of Characters: 2285 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.543 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.364 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.606 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 186 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 146 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 104 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.522 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.963 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.565 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.31 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.529 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.059 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 26, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The argument states that, the city named Calatrava have sufficient...
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Line 1, column 136, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...es and programs used primarily by adults , as they expect the adult population wil...
^^
Line 5, column 155, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... behind this statement is unconvincing. Because there are other reason would have facto...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 294, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'reason'
Suggestion: reason
...business firm sudden product loss would reasoned for their poor authoritative management...
^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 302, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a record' or simply 'records'?
Suggestion: a record; records
...ree. For example, a tech firm published a records of earning and conclude that they had f...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 466, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'divulges'?
Suggestion: divulges
...ous year earning record. After that, it divulge that, their statement is flawed. The po...
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Line 17, column 132, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('merely') instead an adjective, or a noun ('daydreamer') instead of another adjective.
...forced to conclude that, the authors is a merely daydreamer than following crystal, convincing and ...
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Line 21, column 312, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...vide compelling and convincing data. On this criteria, the argument is flawed, incom...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2374.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 426.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57276995305 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71375120269 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492957746479 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 712.8 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 20.0 8.76447105788 228% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.5028718213 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.217391304 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5217391304 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52173913043 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125696737574 0.218282227539 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0355788794456 0.0743258471296 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513661551523 0.0701772020484 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0667889324086 0.128457276422 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371388960584 0.0628817314937 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.5979740519 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 98.500998004 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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