The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station.
"Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this time period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local business that used to advertise during our late-night news programs have just canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attarct more viewers t the program and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level."
The argument could be summarized as, the number of both viewers and the advertisements have been declined over the past year as the result of the late-night program has devoted more time to the national news and less time to the weather and local news. This argument need to be evaluated based on a set of evidences that grantee a proper evaluation.
For instance, the business manager should provide evidence about the quality of the news shown on the late-night program. Perhaps the poor quality of the show's news is the reason of the declination of views' number. Such as the viewers would be more attarcted to a well organized TV show screen and a clear proper voice of the TV speakers, which might be the real reasons of this viewers declination. Consquently, the argument would be weaken if it is conluded that the poor quality of TV show's news and media technics were the real reason of this problem.
Futhermore, this manager should provide evidences about the content of the late-night show is enough for entertaining the viewers. maybe the type of the news itself is the main reason of the declination of the viewers naumber as it is pooring for the local viewers. It should be granteed that the type of the news wether it were local or national gain the interest of the local viewers. for example, the national sports news would attarct more viewers than a major talk of a far not well known nation. Thus, the show should be keen to consider the topics under the the focus of the local people, as it does not matter for the viewers if it is local not international news as much as the content and the show's topic matters.
Moreover, the manager need to show the reason that lead to persue this strategy of the late-night show, which devotes more time to national news than local ones. Perhaps, in the past in was concluded that the viewers number and advertisemenet were decreaseing due to devoting more time to the local news than the national news. thus, the recommendation of the manager argument would be weaken as a proper news strategies would be seriously needed other than devoting more time to either a type of news.
These previously demonstrated evidences should be provided by the business manager of that TV show in order to bolster the argument's recommendation and validate his/her opinion about that case. Whereas, people would be wandering some kind of questions in their own mind in order to take the argument's conclusion as granteed. Consquently, the manager should offer evidences that cover these questions.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Such as the viewers would be more attarcted to a well organized TV show screen and a clear proper voice of the TV speakers, which might be the real reasons of this viewers declination.
Error: attarcted Suggestion: attracted
Sentence: Consquently, the argument would be weaken if it is conluded that the poor quality of TV show's news and media technics were the real reason of this problem.
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: conluded Suggestion: concluded
Error: technics Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Futhermore, this manager should provide evidences about the content of the late-night show is enough for entertaining the viewers. maybe the type of the news itself is the main reason of the declination of the viewers naumber as it is pooring for the local viewers.
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: late-night Suggestion: late night
Error: naumber Suggestion: number
Error: pooring Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: It should be granteed that the type of the news wether it were local or national gain the interest of the local viewers. for example, the national sports news would attarct more viewers than a major talk of a far not well known nation.
Error: attarct Suggestion: attract
Error: wether Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: granteed Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Moreover, the manager need to show the reason that lead to persue this strategy of the late-night show, which devotes more time to national news than local ones.
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: late-night Suggestion: late night
Error: persue Suggestion: pursue
Sentence: Perhaps, in the past in was concluded that the viewers number and advertisemenet were decreaseing due to devoting more time to the local news than the national news. thus, the recommendation of the manager argument would be weaken as a proper news strategies would be seriously needed other than devoting more time to either a type of news.
Error: advertisemenet Suggestion: advertisement
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: decreaseing Suggestion: decreasing
Sentence: Whereas, people would be wandering some kind of questions in their own mind in order to take the argument's conclusion as granteed.
Error: granteed Suggestion: No alternate word
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 440 350
No. of Characters: 2068 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.58 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.7 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.563 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.41 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.421 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.671 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.159 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The argument could be summarized as, the...
^^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nces that grantee a proper evaluation. For instance, the business manager sh...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 158, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'shows'' or 'show's'?
Suggestion: shows'; show's
...rogram. Perhaps the poor quality of the shows news is the reason of the declination o...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 383, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'viewers'' or 'viewer's'?
Suggestion: viewers'; viewer's
...which might be the real reasons of this viewers declination. Consquently, the argument ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ere the real reason of this problem. Futhermore, this manager should provide ...
^^^
Line 5, column 78, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ovide evidences about the content of the late-night show is enough for entertaini...
^^
Line 5, column 136, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Maybe
...is enough for entertaining the viewers. maybe the type of the news itself is the main...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 392, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...gain the interest of the local viewers. for example, the national sports news would...
^^^
Line 5, column 418, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...ocal viewers. for example, the national sports news would attarct more viewers than a ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 566, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...ld be keen to consider the topics under the the focus of the local people, as it does n...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 566, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...ld be keen to consider the topics under the the focus of the local people, as it does n...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 708, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'shows'' or 'show's'?
Suggestion: shows'; show's
...nal news as much as the content and the shows topic matters. Moreover, the mana...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...content and the shows topic matters. Moreover, the manager need to show the r...
^^^
Line 7, column 332, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
... the local news than the national news. thus, the recommendation of the manager argu...
^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... more time to either a type of news. These previously demonstrated evidences ...
^^^
Line 9, column 127, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arguments'' or 'argument's'?
Suggestion: arguments'; argument's
...of that TV show in order to bolster the arguments recommendation and validate his/her opi...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 295, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arguments'' or 'argument's'?
Suggestion: arguments'; argument's
... in their own mind in order to take the arguments conclusion as granteed. Consquently, th...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, moreover, so, thus, well, whereas, for example, for instance, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2113.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 439.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8132118451 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62336659528 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.400911161731 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 642.6 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5655731149 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.294117647 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8235294118 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11764705882 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312022755501 0.218282227539 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125350596175 0.0743258471296 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110298772527 0.0701772020484 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20598873628 0.128457276422 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124086523312 0.0628817314937 197% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.