The following recommendation appeared in a memo from the mayor of the town of Hopewell.
"Two years ago, the nearby town of Ocean View built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. During the past two years, tourism in Ocean View has increased, new businesses have opened there, and Ocean View's tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. Therefore, the best way to improve Hopewell's economy—and generate additional tax revenues—is to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean View."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Tourism depends on numerous factors at any place that cultivates those factors. A golf course and resort hotel are there in many places in the world. By observing the memo from the mayor of the town of Hopewell, it instigates so many questions in mind. Let us enumetate the questions it pose.
Do tourists, who are visiting the Ocean View, specifically have interest in the golf course and resort hotel? Because golf course is not unique to Ocean view town. Golf courses and resorts are available in many places of the world. So, golf course and resorts do not stand a valid reason for attracting the tourists as they have many options other than Ocean view. So, finding what is actually making them interested about Ocean view is important to understand the tourism in Ocean town.
Is the tax system in Ocean view similar to the tax system of Hopewell? It is a very important to find whether the Ocean view tax system is similar to Hopewell. If the tax system of Ocean view is different from the Hopewell in manner that Hopewell levies only a small percent of what Ocean view levies, then it is of no use to build a golf course and resort hotel as Hopewell, anyway, charges less taxes and expected amount of tax may not be generated to improve the Hopewell's economy.
Is the tourism only responsible for the improvement in the economy of Ocean View? Because a economy of a town depends not only tourism but many other factors. By evaluating all the factors which helped in improving the Ocean View economy, we and find the reason for the improvement of Ocean View economy.
Are Climate and Landscapes in Ocean view similar to the Hopewell's? Climate and Landscapes play a major role in attracting tourists. A town with beautiful landscape and pleasant climate conditions attract tourists better than the town with not so beautiful landscae and poor climate conditions.
So, answers for all the above question would help to evaluate the recommendation of the mayor of the town of Hopewell.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK. where to get 'anyway, charges less taxes and expected amount of tax may not be generated to improve the Hopewell's economy'?
argument 3 -- OK
argument 4 -- OK
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Also need to argue like:
maybe it worked only 'Two years ago', not nowadays.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 346 350
No. of Characters: 1611 1500
No. of Different Words: 146 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.313 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.656 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.485 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.063 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.389 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.365 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.644 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.18 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 288, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'poses'?
Suggestion: poses
...mind. Let us enumetate the questions it pose. Do tourists, who are visiting the O...
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Line 3, column 111, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...st in the golf course and resort hotel? Because golf course is not unique to Ocean view...
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Line 5, column 320, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...hat Ocean view levies, then it is of no use to build a golf course and resort hotel...
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Line 7, column 91, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...t in the economy of Ocean View? Because a economy of a town depends not only tour...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, anyway, but, if, may, so, then, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.9520958084 15% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1658.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 346.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79190751445 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53047184949 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.442196531792 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 525.6 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 60.901400718 57.8364921388 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2631578947 119.503703932 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2105263158 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.42105263158 5.70786347227 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343212036083 0.218282227539 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127806565867 0.0743258471296 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742001803464 0.0701772020484 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174913327112 0.128457276422 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0709414404797 0.0628817314937 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.3799401198 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 12.3882235529 48% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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