The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.
"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Board of Directors of Monarch book store, known for its wide selection on books on all subjects, are recommending here that opening a cafe in the Monarch book store will help in attracting more customers and better with Regal cafe which has done the same. Whether the recommendation is likely to have indented result can be determined only after knowing the answer to few questions.
Firstly, is the space occupied by children’s book section is sufficient for cafe. The board is making the assumption that by eliminating children’s book section they can create enough space to open a cafe. For instance if the cafe needs more space( as a comfortable and likeable is expected to require) they would need to remove more sections which will then impact the book store popularity because its wide collection of books is what the store is known for. So answering the question regarding the space needed for cafe is must before deciding upon the recommendation.
Secondly, Will the decline in percentage of population under age ten will impact the customer base of Monarch book store. The board assumes that since the percentage of population under ten is going to decline, then removing the children’s book section will not impact the customer base. If, for instance, children under ten forms the main portion of the stores customer base then discontinuing children book section can have serious effect on stores profit and customers. Taking into consideration the above example, the answer to the assumption if proved to be false can weaken the assumption made by the board.
Only after getting the answer for the above few questions can one decide on the recommendation as a different answer to the question can actually weaken the recommendation and it can fail to produce the expected result.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 298 350
No. of Characters: 1470 1500
No. of Different Words: 141 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.155 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.933 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.689 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 100 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.091 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.405 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.41 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.639 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 366, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...etermined only after knowing the answer to few questions. Firstly, is the spa...
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Line 9, column 361, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'stores'' or 'store's'?
Suggestion: stores'; store's
...under ten forms the main portion of the stores customer base then discontinuing childr...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 28.8173652695 28% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1525.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 298.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11744966443 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86575609445 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496644295302 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2972433668 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.636363636 119.503703932 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0909090909 23.324526521 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36363636364 5.70786347227 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263333133573 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105648239066 0.0743258471296 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0911374442443 0.0701772020484 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173150714237 0.128457276422 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102935212352 0.0628817314937 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 98.500998004 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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