The following is a recommendation from the business manager of Monarch Books.
"Since its opening in Collegeville twenty years ago, Monarch Books has developed a large
customer base due to its reader-friendly atmosphere and wide selection of books on all
subjects. Last month, Book and Bean, a combination bookstore and coffee shop, announced
its intention to open a Collegeville store. Monarch Books should open its own in-store café in
the space currently devoted to children's books. Given recent national census data indicating
a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten, sales of children's
books are likely to decline. By replacing its children's books section with a café, Monarch
Books can increase profits and ward off competition from Book and Bean."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the
argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and
what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted
Monarch Books' manager has suggested that Monarch Books, which is a store that is majorly into book sales, should consider including coffee in its business because of the advent of a rival store, Book and Bean. While this is might eventually prove to be gainful for Monarch Books, the argument fails to prove this. This is because the bases, which are as a result undue analogy, unjustifiable assumptions and illogical reasonings, all impairs the claim of the manager.
While citing Book and Bean, which is a synthesis of bookstore and coffee shop, as an imminent threat to Monarch’s sales, the manager assumes that Book and Bean is largely into book sales. This might not even be the case. Book and Bean might be majorly into coffee. This store might only be offering books to customer who prefers to stay a bit while taking their coffee. In fact, it is possible that their book section is not as comprehensive as Monarch’s store. To validate this argument, the author needs to prove that the Book and Bean’s book section is largely into book sales and it is as cosmic as Monarch store.
Also, while making reference to a nationwide statistics about the decline of children under the age of ten, the author assumes Collegeville is also facing the same enigma. As a matter of fact, the opposite might be the case. Collegeville might actually be experiencing a steady increase in the demography of under-ten students. Hence, shutting down the children’s section of Monarch book store might be perilous. To improve this argument, the author needs to show that truly, the nationwide census reflects the current trend in Collegeville. Through this, the author would be able to ratiocinate if closing the children section is justifiable or not.
Lastly, quoting the success of Book and Bean in other town, the author assumes Collegeville denizens have propensity for coffee. This assumption might erroneous. This is because Book and Bean, which might is purported to be successful, might be flourishing because of its town’s proclivity for coffee. This also implies that Book and Bean might founders if it is opened in Collegeville. The author also failed to consider the presence of other coffee store in the town which might actually cause the proposed coffee section in Monarch to fail tremendously. Hence, the author need to consider its clients’ choice before opening a coffee section.
In conclusion, the manager of Monarch’s book had shown his interest in the store’s growth by suggesting the opening of a coffee section. While this might sound great, the manager’s bases all debilitates his contention. Therefore, the manager needs to meticulously consider other alternative exegesis for his bases before the store acts on his suggestion. With this consideration, Monarch books will be able to consider if opening a coffee store might be beneficial or detrimental.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 473 350
No. of Characters: 2336 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.664 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.939 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.623 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.92 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.807 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.68 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.525 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 303, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...se of its town’s proclivity for coffee. This also implies that Book and Bean might f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, hence, if, lastly, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, in fact, as a matter of fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2424.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 473.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12473572939 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76381439284 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.424947145877 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.0 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.0853816302 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.96 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.92 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248751674751 0.218282227539 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887998899063 0.0743258471296 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.083009534153 0.0701772020484 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17010540456 0.128457276422 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0702399200292 0.0628817314937 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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