The following was used as part of an internet advertising company's appeal to businesses: Furniture Depot employed our internet advertising company to help. Since then its sales increased by 10% over last year's totals. Furniture Depot's success demonstra

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The following was used as part of an internet advertising company's appeal to businesses: Furniture Depot employed our internet advertising company to help. Since then its sales increased by 10% over last year's totals. Furniture Depot's success demonstrates how using our internet services can increase your profitability.

There are many unstated assumptions and leaps in the logical flow of the arguement which makes it seems specious.

First of all, although it states that the sales increased by 10% over the last year's totals but it does not shed light on what has been the rate of increase of sales for the previous years. It might have been possible that previous year's increase was 30% which implies that the company's annual rate of increase of sales has taken a dip.

Next, the contribution of internet advertising company in the increase of sales is also not mentioned. It may have been possible that the advertising company had nothing to do with the sales at all. May be it was all due to the introduction of a new item in the inventory that resulted into the increase of sales. Or may be because of a new sales scheme that they introduced which resulted in attracting more customers. Hence, there could have been several other reasons for the increase in sales.

The internet advertising company also doesn't state specifically what kind advertising does it do. It might be the case that they advertise only a limited amount of products or just the name of the furniture depot. In which case it may not be contributing much to the increase in the sales.

Specifications regarding the content of advertisement would have made their claim a little stronger. Also stating the facts regarding how much of the increase in sales was due to internet and what were the major products that sold on internet would have bolstered their claim.

Hence, due to the above mentioned reasons the arguement presented is flawed.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 200, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: Maybe
...ad nothing to do with the sales at all. May be it was all due to the introduction of a...
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Line 7, column 39, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... The internet advertising company also doesnt state specifically what kind advertisin...
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Line 9, column 102, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ave made their claim a little stronger. Also stating the facts regarding how much of...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'regarding', 'so', 'first of all']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.244966442953 0.25644967241 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.174496644295 0.15541462614 112% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0872483221477 0.0836205057962 104% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0335570469799 0.0520304965353 64% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0436241610738 0.0272364105082 160% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.134228187919 0.125424944231 107% => OK
Participles: 0.0570469798658 0.0416121511921 137% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.60931245048 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0167785234899 0.026700313972 63% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.114093959732 0.113004496875 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0268456375839 0.0255425247493 105% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0335570469799 0.0127820249294 263% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1607.0 2731.13054187 59% => OK
No of words: 278.0 446.07635468 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.78057553957 6.12365571057 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.57801047555 89% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.287769784173 0.378187486979 76% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.23381294964 0.287650121315 81% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.18345323741 0.208842608468 88% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.10071942446 0.135150697306 75% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60931245048 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 207.018472906 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482014388489 0.469332199767 103% => OK
Word variations: 46.1533675395 52.1807786196 88% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.039408867 70% => OK
Sentence length: 19.8571428571 23.2022227129 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.5477880289 57.7814097925 58% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.785714286 141.986410481 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 23.2022227129 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.642857142857 0.724660767414 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 43.2384378212 51.9672348444 83% => OK
Elegance: 1.73333333333 1.8405768891 94% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221189845341 0.441005458295 50% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.170199809122 0.135418324435 126% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.113484938682 0.0829849096947 137% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.709325985906 0.58762219726 121% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.177612270145 0.147661913831 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106834983713 0.193483328276 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564717227814 0.0970749176394 58% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.363558833733 0.42659136922 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.151221886495 0.0774707102158 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129203461841 0.312017818177 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546429191244 0.0698173142475 78% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.33743842365 120% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.87684729064 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 6.46551724138 155% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 5.36822660099 19% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 14.657635468 89% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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