The following was written by a group of developers in the city of Monroe.
"A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. At present, the nearest jazz club is over 60 miles away from Monroe; thus, our proposed club, the C Note, would have the local market all to itself. In addition, there is ample evidence of the popularity of jazz in Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's jazz festival last summer, several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe, and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly.' Finally, a nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment. We therefore predict that the C Note cannot help but make money."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The argument makes a number of unsubstantiated assumptions regarding the profitability of jazz music club in Monroe. In general, careful examination to this supporting evidence reveals that it lends little credibly support to this applicant’s claim. There remain some questoins that need be answering before any steps can be taken.
The argument assumes that if 100000people attendet Monroe's jazz festival than jazz music club in Monroe will be popular. However, it could be that the majority of the people that came to festival were from other cities. Therefore, it could be that there are a lack of jazz fans in Monroe.
Another unstated assumtions the argument makes that the jazz music club will profitable because several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe. Nevertheless, it is not clear how this fact affect to popularity of the new club. These popular jazz musicians might be spent whole their times out of the city, having world tours. Unless the author provides more information about these popular musicians then it could be a wrong decision to open jazz club.
Besides it, the author based on nationwide study claims that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment. However, it is not clear the representative and the valididty of this survey. It can be asked only among juzz clubs and, moreover, it is not clear the purpose of their spendig money. The jazz entertainment might have been a numer of big concerts but not the concert in jazz club. Unless the survey is fully representative, valid and relibly it is not be used for proving the argument.
In conclusion, the recommendation to open jazz club in Monroe is not well supported. To strenghten the argument the author has to provide better evidence about popularity of jazz in the city. The author must also provide the more information about nationwide study that he mentioned. Unless, the assumption addressed the argument falls apart and it might be a mistake to open jazz club.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'besides', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'nevertheless', 'regarding', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'as to', 'in conclusion', 'in general']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.275956284153 0.25644967241 108% => OK
Verbs: 0.147540983607 0.15541462614 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0792349726776 0.0836205057962 95% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0491803278689 0.0520304965353 95% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0382513661202 0.0272364105082 140% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.117486338798 0.125424944231 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0327868852459 0.0416121511921 79% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.8289595297 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0273224043716 0.026700313972 102% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.112021857923 0.113004496875 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0300546448087 0.0255425247493 118% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00819672131148 0.0127820249294 64% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1997.0 2731.13054187 73% => OK
No of words: 331.0 446.07635468 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.0332326284 6.12365571057 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.57801047555 93% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.323262839879 0.378187486979 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.253776435045 0.287650121315 88% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.175226586103 0.208842608468 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.114803625378 0.135150697306 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8289595297 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 207.018472906 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519637462236 0.469332199767 111% => OK
Word variations: 54.2752114393 52.1807786196 104% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.039408867 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.4210526316 23.2022227129 75% => OK
Sentence length SD: 21.0334122798 57.7814097925 36% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.105263158 141.986410481 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4210526316 23.2022227129 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.789473684211 0.724660767414 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 42.7986961361 51.9672348444 82% => OK
Elegance: 1.81395348837 1.8405768891 99% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.47549329583 0.441005458295 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.122842504535 0.135418324435 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0830840482704 0.0829849096947 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.575198010983 0.58762219726 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0850068478724 0.147661913831 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.212931300332 0.193483328276 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106667488022 0.0970749176394 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.441898216918 0.42659136922 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.049471438988 0.0774707102158 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.343789279869 0.312017818177 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450743365381 0.0698173142475 65% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.33743842365 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.87684729064 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 6.46551724138 139% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 5.36822660099 75% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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