The Gordon Act, which established a wildlife refuge in the Big Dark Swamp, is currently up for reauthorization. The act prohibits the building of roads or cutting of old growth trees in the swamp, though it permits hunting. Many blamed logging activities for the decline of the bird population, especially that of the dappled grackle. The grackle population has continued to decline since the passage of the law, demonstrating that the Gordon Act has not been sufficient to protect the species. Another nearby refuge, the Wayne County Marsh Habitat, bans all mining, logging, and hunting. Wayne County officials have not reported a decline in the grackle population there. This proves that hunting, not logging, was responsible for the population drop in Broomall County. Thus, Broomall County should not reauthorize the Gordon Act unless it is amended to include the same provisions as those in Wayne County.
The editorial claims that with a ban on hunting, the decrement in the grackle population can be controlled; hence calling for a major amendment in the Gordon Act. But the statement cannot be fully supported since there appears few fallacies that question the argument.
Firstly, the species of Grackle inhabiting into the two different locations- Broomall County and Wayne County might have different habitual characteristics
The ecosystem at Broomall County could be different to the ecosystem at Wayne County. The environment at Broomall County might be way more hostile, primarily due to difficult topography or a higher population of predators of Grackle in that area. With the ban on hunting, the present population of the
Gradle may be preserved, but this in no way guarantees that the surviving population may flourish in that region.
Secondly, the argument claims that a ban on hunting is sufficient to preserve the Grackle population, whereas logging activity possess no threat on the survival of the species. This shows a major flaw in the argument, as a ban on just hunting would not suffice to creating a more comfortable environment for the Grackles. The Wayne County officials have not even considered the possiblity of mining as a potential cause for such decrease. A complete ban on hunting might be a good step towards conserving these faunas, while a blatant ignorance to the extent of damage caused by the mining and logging activity might result in even higher dip in the population of Grackles.
Lastly, the argument claims that the Gordon Act after its amendment, would be followed with the same sincerity as the people of Wayne County. It is highly possible that the reason for the decreasing Grackle population is logging. But, despite a ban on logging, the stubborn people of Broomall County, with no respect to the laws on conservation of faunas, have resulted in such deaths. Even after imposing such ban on hunting and logging, people still might not follow the law. Hence, it would be presumptions to state that ban on hunting and logging would fix the issue, as the extent of law enforcement at these two different places may vastly vary.
Hence, it can be concluded that while ban on hunting seems to be a positive step toward conservation of the Grackle population, it would be imprudent to assume that such amendment would guarantee thier absolute survival. The claim calls for a broader research on other variables as well before jumping into conclusions.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 412 350
No. of Characters: 2037 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.505 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.944 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.706 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 161 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.889 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.013 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.632 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, still, well, whereas, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2099.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 412.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09466019417 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78538744385 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453883495146 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2945804903 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.1875 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.75 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.875 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0868006225591 0.218282227539 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0373747700613 0.0743258471296 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0323164873835 0.0701772020484 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0415938721635 0.128457276422 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399409984764 0.0628817314937 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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