“If we want to save money on municipal garbage disposal fees, we need to encourage our residents to recycle more. Late last year, our neighboring town, Hayesworth, passed a law requiring that all households recycle paper and glass, or pay a fine. Since that time, Hayesworth has seen its garbage disposal costs significantly decrease. If we implemented an advertising campaign encouraging our residents to recycle, Masontown would also save money on disposal of its waste.”
The argument claims that if money on municipal garbage disposal fees has to be saved, then residents of Masontown needs to recycle their waste products.He even proposes to organize an advertising campaign to encourage the residents to practice the same.Sated in this way, the argument fails to mention several key points on the basis of which it could be evaluated.The conclusion relies on assumption,for which there is no clear evidence. Therefore, the argument is rather weak, unconvincing and has several flaws.
First, the argument readily claims that encouraging residents of Masontown to recycle their wastes, will help to save money on municipal garbage disposal fees.However, the author has not provided any evidence to prove the same.In fact, if the author would have provided some examples to show how recycling waste products is bringing down the garbage disposal fees in Masontown,the argument could have been strengthened even further.
Second, the argument claims that since the time Hayesworth passed a law requiring all households to recycle paper and glass,its garbage disposal costs has significantly decreased.This is again a very weak and unsupported claim as the argument does not demonstrate any correlation between the facts how recycling paper and glass has lowered garbage disposal costs.On the other hand, there is no evidence to prove that households has started recycling paper and glass in the fear of fine.It might be the case that residents of Hayesworth are genuinely concerned about environmental pollution and has started using eco-friendly products, thus reducing the usage of glass and paper.Hence, without sufficient evidence, the argument does not sound convincing.
Finally, the argument concludes that implementing advertising campaign to encourage the residents of Masontown to recycle waste products then Masontown would save money on disposal of its wastes.From this statement again, it is not at all clear how advertising campaign will help to encourage the residents to recycle and Masontown will save money on disposal of waste.Without supporting evidence and examples ,one is left with the impression that the claim is more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence. As a result, this conclusion has no legs to stand on.
In summary, the argument is flawed and therefore unconvincing. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant facts. In order to assess the merits of a certain situation, it is essential to have full knowledge of all contributing factors.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 410 350
No. of Characters: 2119 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.5 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.168 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.795 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 132 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 104 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 37.273 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 30.902 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.384 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.64 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.093 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...n needs to recycle their waste products.He even proposes to organize an advertisin...
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...rage the residents to practice the same.Sated in this way, the argument fails to ment...
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...he basis of which it could be evaluated.The conclusion relies on assumption,for whi...
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...provided any evidence to prove the same.In fact, if the author would have provided...
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...lass has lowered garbage disposal costs.On the other hand, there is no evidence to...
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... knowledge of all contributing factors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, thus, as to, in fact, in summary, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2179.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 396.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50252525253 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04522734801 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469696969697 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 44.0 22.8473053892 193% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 242.926346608 57.8364921388 420% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 242.111111111 119.503703932 203% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 44.0 23.324526521 189% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.8888888889 5.70786347227 261% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260269026807 0.218282227539 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.082271905722 0.0743258471296 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0878678648881 0.0701772020484 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139868516196 0.128457276422 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0725815602787 0.0628817314937 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.5 14.3799401198 184% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 18.36 48.3550499002 38% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 21.6 12.197005988 177% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.51 12.5979740519 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.32208582834 115% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 12.3882235529 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 19.6 11.1389221557 176% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.9071856287 168% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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