An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In one simple glance we can see that the new breed of millet, engineered to be high in vitamin A, seems to be an appropriate way to overcome the deficiency of the vitamin in the impoverished nation of Tagus. But before promoting the product a few things need to be accounted for.
The argument suggests that Tagus is an impoverished nation. On the other hand the seeds for this new type of millet cost more, though the author adds that farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. But the question here is whether production would require monetary support from the government. Since, a government of an impoverished nation is already suffering under the weight of financial liabilities, we must check whether this investment will have any adverse impact on the current economic scenario. A cost-benefit analysis and in-depth study of past agrarian structure and investments will shed light on this.
Since a farmer needs to consider several factors before farming a crop it gives rise to questions pertaining to agriculture. Will the new crop and it's cultivation have an adverse impact on the farming cycle and the nutritional content of the soil? This is essential because farmers grow crops in systematic cycles depending on climate of the area, nutritional content of the soil, requirements of the crop, etc. In such a scenario, if the introduction of a new crop hampers the growth of other indigenous crops that have been grown from a long time, then it might not be propitious to add the new breed for the farmer.
Also we must check whether the new breed of millet has specific requirements for cultivation and the possibility of these requirements to be fulfilled. If a commitment to grow a crop is made and the idea promoted without answering this then in the future run, either the crop itself would suffer from diseases or else the surrounding area might get affected. Hence, requirements of the crop must be taken into account.
The argument suggests that the people of Tagus already have millet in their staple diet. This indicates that they will easily adopt the new breed as well. But appropriate dietary implications must be studied and the side-effects of the millet should also be noted. Since, the population is not already accustomed with the new breed and might have effects on the body in addition to those interested or targeted we should take care of this question in the earlier stage itself.
The argument also suggests that farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. The impact of this measure on the economic status of the farmer and the government should also be considered. An educated analysis of the scenario before the addition of the breed and after the addition of the breed will help us answer this. Answering it is essential because farmers need to know what kind of impact would subsidies have on them before growing the crop.
Also before accepting the new breed of millet we must check for other options which can have similar or better impact and reducing deficiency. This market understanding will help us gain a bigger outlook and ensure that only the most apt method is implemented to combat in-deficiency.
Hence, we have considered a few essential questions that must be answered before cultivating the new breed of millet. This will help us ensure that the step is taken keeping everything in mind, indicating that all the possibilities have been considered and thoroughly thought. To summarize following are the list of questions that we have mentioned above:
1. Does the production require monetary support from the government?
2. Does the new crop and it's cultivation have an adverse impact on the farming cycle and the nutritional content of the soil?
3. Does the new breed of millet have specific requirements for cultivation and what is the possibility of these requirements to be fulfilled?
4. What are the dietary implications and side-effects of the millet on the body?
5. What is the impact of subsidies on the economic status of the farmer and the government?
6. Are their other options available which can have similar or better impact and reducing deficiency?
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the arguments are not right on the point.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 37 15
No. of Words: 704 350
No. of Characters: 3409 1500
No. of Different Words: 265 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.151 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.842 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.734 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 237 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 175 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 122 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 87 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.027 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.584 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.405 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.264 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.458 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 8 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nvestments will shed light on this. Since a farmer needs to consider several fact...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...to add the new breed for the farmer. Also we must check whether the new breed of ...
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Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ave on them before growing the crop. Also before accepting the new breed of mille...
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Line 18, column 3, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...he nutritional content of the soil? 3. Does the new breed of millet have specific r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, so, then, well, in addition, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 29.0 12.9520958084 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 26.0 11.1786427146 233% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 28.8173652695 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 91.0 55.5748502994 164% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3502.0 2260.96107784 155% => OK
No of words: 704.0 441.139720559 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97443181818 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.1510191538 4.56307096286 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76875996911 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 204.123752495 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.390625 0.468620217663 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1082.7 705.55239521 153% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 19.7664670659 167% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6263017601 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.121212121 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.51515151515 5.70786347227 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 14.0 5.15768463074 271% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.20758483034 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363360257187 0.218282227539 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101868427421 0.0743258471296 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.096193489097 0.0701772020484 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138260128142 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105701476199 0.0628817314937 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 98.500998004 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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