An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The above issue provided a case of the impoverished nation of Tagus, where the people are suffering from deficiency of vitamin A and they find a new breed of millet high in vitamin A and for breeding this new breed the government decided to pay more subsidies and moreover the government should decide to do everything for promoting this new type of millet. This argument is quite interesting and it creates a lot of vague and ambiguous condition and also lots of questions are there for answer.
The nation of Tagus are impoverished and thus they need vitamin A containing seeds and for that farmers are paid more for farming these breed. But, it is not mentioned here that the farmers can able to farm lots of seeds in comparison their total demand. It can be possible that any natural disaster will occur and it will damage all the crops. Furthermore, insects and pesticides can also damage the crops and it can be possible that all the crops are damaged. In these circumstances, the government will face a more critical and convoluted condition. So. however, the government should not only basis on the millet. They should pay an accurate amount for these breed and also find some other sources for vitamin A.
Another important issue to underscore here is that here an assumption is made that people will readily adopt the new variety but their is no strong evidence on that basis. It can be possible that this breed is not become suitable for some people or it will create some pernicious effect on human health. Then, spending lot of money on the cultivation of this breed will not produce any good effect. A enthusiastic committee should be made containing lots of researchers and scientists those evaluate the positive and negative sides of this breed and the effect of this breed on the human health.
Another, most important issue is for reducing vitamin A deficiency on the nation of Tagus, they thought millet will be a good and benign subsidy. But, the government should consider the other subsidies which can also contain vitamin A with great amount but also the value of which is very cheap and people can easily afford these breed and the most important is the breed is commonplace. Then, the government can easily afford the breed and they have not spend a lots of budget for these breed.
In conclusion, in this circumstances, it is not clearly mentioned that the breed is the only easily accessible and cheap subsidies among the other subsidies and this breed can be consumed by every people. For that instance, it is the paramount duty of the government to discuss and find the positive and negative aspects of the breed and also find the impact of that breed on the human health and then provide a huge fund for that breed. And, the government should find some other variety with cheap rate and great impact on the human health.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 498 350
No. of Characters: 2316 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.724 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.651 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.449 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 144 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.211 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.259 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.55 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.127 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 130, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
... will readily adopt the new variety but their is no strong evidence on that basis. It...
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Line 3, column 400, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'An' instead of 'A' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: An
...breed will not produce any good effect. A enthusiastic committee should be made c...
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Line 4, column 455, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'spent'.
Suggestion: spent
...sily afford the breed and they have not spend a lots of budget for these breed. In c...
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Line 4, column 461, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
...fford the breed and they have not spend a lots of budget for these breed. In conclusi...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 19, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...get for these breed. In conclusion, in this circumstances, it is not clearly mentio...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, moreover, so, then, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 11.1786427146 268% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 28.8173652695 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2357.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 498.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73293172691 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5082507678 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.379518072289 0.468620217663 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.9 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.2845111862 57.8364921388 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.052631579 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2105263158 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78947368421 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351530027491 0.218282227539 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11441572504 0.0743258471296 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101762663885 0.0701772020484 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219461438604 0.128457276422 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0968787527807 0.0628817314937 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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