An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The argument states that, in response to vitamin A deficiency in the impoverished nation of Tagus, International development organisation has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. The argument has many flaws and is devoid of evidences to support the argument.
First of all, the argument fails to mention the overall percentage of people deficient in vitamin A. there is no sign of whether the entire population of Tagus has been checked medically to confirm the statement. also whether the deficiency was identified due to a common deficiency disease. it is mentioned that the staple food of the people of Tagus was millets. if the new variety is rich in vitamin A, then what was the problem with the old variety which the people were consuming? there is no clear picture of the distinction between the 2 varieties of millets mentioned in the argument. there is a mention about the cost of the new type of millet being high and that farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millets. but there is no mention about the farming land and the number of farmers. whether the same farmers will used to cultivate the new variety is a big question mark.
also whether new land will be provided or the same farming land of the old variety will be utilized? The weather and the nature of fertility of the soil for farming are also not mentioned. also, if the deficiency is leading to an emergency situations, then action has to be taken immediately. How long will it take for the new millet to be produced by farming? what will happen to the people of Tagus till then? will they not undergo any serious medical conditions? what is the guarantee that the new variety will yield good results? there is no mention about whether the new variety of millets have been administered and found to be productive and usable? The answers for the above questions are not answered in the argument.
also, it could be argued that will only another variety of millet produce significant change in the levels of vitamin ? can ' t there be any other solution to the given problem? there could be many other foods which are a rich source of vitamin A. people could be asked to try that also. Instead of asking the government to do everything to promote the new variety of millet, the government should also focus on the alternate ways of getting rid of vitamin A deficiency .
To close, it can be stated that there are no evidence to support that the new variety of millet will bring down vitamin A deficiency. also, the government should not restrict itself to a single method but also look for other alternatives. farming conditions also play a vital part in bringing the best outcome of a product. Thus the above evidence supports the argument cannot hold in a stringent way.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 489 350
No. of Characters: 2252 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.702 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.605 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.523 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 161 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 44.455 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 24.167 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.422 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.679 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.142 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 207, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...f millet high in vitamin A. The argument has many flaws and is devoid of evidence...
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Line 1, column 489, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Also
...ked medically to confirm the statement. also whether the deficiency was identified d...
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Line 1, column 489, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: also,
...ked medically to confirm the statement. also whether the deficiency was identified d...
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Line 1, column 568, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: It
...ied due to a common deficiency disease. it is mentioned that the staple food of th...
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Line 1, column 641, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: If
...ood of the people of Tagus was millets. if the new variety is rich in vitamin A, t...
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Line 1, column 762, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: There
...ariety which the people were consuming? there is no clear picture of the distinction ...
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...s of millets mentioned in the argument. there is a mention about the cost of the new ...
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Line 1, column 1020, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: But
...for farming the new variety of millets. but there is no mention about the farming l...
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Line 1, column 1094, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Whether
...farming land and the number of farmers. whether the same farmers will used to cultivate...
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Line 1, column 1094, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...farming land and the number of farmers. whether the same farmers will used to cultivate...
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Line 1, column 1124, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'use'
Suggestion: use
... farmers. whether the same farmers will used to cultivate the new variety is a big q...
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Line 1, column 1182, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Also
...the new variety is a big question mark. also whether new land will be provided or th...
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Line 1, column 1182, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: also,
...the new variety is a big question mark. also whether new land will be provided or th...
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Line 1, column 1371, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...oil for farming are also not mentioned. also, if the deficiency is leading to an eme...
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Line 1, column 1422, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'situation'?
Suggestion: situation
...e deficiency is leading to an emergency situations, then action has to be taken immediatel...
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Line 1, column 1543, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: What
...e new millet to be produced by farming? what will happen to the people of Tagus till...
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Suggestion: Will
...appen to the people of Tagus till then? will they not undergo any serious medical co...
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Line 1, column 1648, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: What
...undergo any serious medical conditions? what is the guarantee that the new variety w...
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Line 1, column 1716, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: There
...he new variety will yield good results? there is no mention about whether the new var...
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Line 1, column 1909, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Also
...tions are not answered in the argument. also, it could be argued that will only anot...
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Suggestion: Can
...icant change in the levels of vitamin ? can t there be any other solution to the g...
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Line 1, column 2032, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nt change in the levels of vitamin ? can t there be any other solution to the giv...
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Line 1, column 2086, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: There
...ny other solution to the given problem? there could be many other foods which are a r...
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Line 1, column 2190, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...in A. people could be asked to try that also. Instead of asking the government to do...
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Line 1, column 2377, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...s of getting rid of vitamin A deficiency . To close, it can be stated that there a...
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Line 1, column 2514, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Also
...t will bring down vitamin A deficiency. also, the government should not restrict its...
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Line 1, column 2619, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Farming
...d but also look for other alternatives. farming conditions also play a vital part in br...
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Line 1, column 2704, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...bringing the best outcome of a product. Thus the above evidence supports the argume...
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Line 1, column 2736, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...roduct. Thus the above evidence supports the argument cannot hold in a stringent ...
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Line 1, column 2763, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a stringent way" with adverb for "stringent"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ence supports the argument cannot hold in a stringent way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, then, thus, as to, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2288.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 489.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67893660532 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59570363835 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.431492842536 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 739.8 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.07934841 57.8364921388 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.8965517241 119.503703932 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8620689655 23.324526521 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.1724137931 5.70786347227 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 1.0 5.15768463074 19% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 30.0 5.25449101796 571% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.385606835269 0.218282227539 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105308482058 0.0743258471296 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110242259626 0.0701772020484 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.385606835269 0.128457276422 300% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0628817314937 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 14.3799401198 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 12.5979740519 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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