An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The author claims here that the government should do all kind of steps to promote the new millet which can be the resolution of the vitamin A deficiency among the nation Tagus.Narrated in this way the author distorts the view of the situation by manipulating facts & providing poor reasoning. To support this argument the author reasons that as millet is already a staple food in Tagus , people will love this eclectic of millet.However, careful scrutiny view of this evidence reveals that it provide little credible support to the author's recommendation.Therefore ,the argument can considered as unsubstantiated.
First of all,the author readily assume that the farmer will agree to farming this new type of millet without having a talk with them.This assumptions do not have much solid ground. Because what happened if the farmers don't want to take risk to farming a new millet? For example, it can be happened the farming procedure of this new millet is different form the previous millet & he farmer not well informed about that procedure. In addition , the author did not not mention what happened to the previous millet if they wanted to farm a new one.In this circumstances, it will be much more convincing if the author specifically mentioned about that.
The argument readily claims that the people of the Tagus will accept this new variety without having a research. Though millet is a staple food in Tagus, there is no sure that people of Tagus will also palate this. This is again an unconvincing merely absurd assumption. Because what the happened if the new millet don't have good taste,or the people of the Tagus don't like this. As a food item there should be taste variety among people. So without doing the taste research through people assume of people acceptance is not so sagacious.Hence this is again a incomplete logic by the argument.
Finally,here the author fails to focus the major & most important co- relation of economic status of this new millet.As the new type millet cost more, it's sell cost will be more. But the author did clarify here any product price.What if the price of the millet is so high that Tagus people can't afford them? Or what happened as the millet has high price people want to buy other millet with low price which don;t have vitamin ? Without giving answer to this question the reader left with an impression that the claims made by the author are more a wishful thinker rather than a substantive evidence.
Im epilogue, The author argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further the author must provide some concrete evidence that why people of Tagus will like this millet. Finally , for better asses the argument the author must give necessary information about the price & the economical condition of people Tagus relation.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 483 350
No. of Characters: 2269 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.688 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.698 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.421 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.421 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.222 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.37 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.586 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.132 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...min A deficiency among the nation Tagus.Narrated in this way the author distorts the vie...
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...eople will love this eclectic of millet.However, careful scrutiny view of this evidence...
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...illet if they wanted to farm a new one.In this circumstances, it will be much mor...
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...d if the new millet dont have good taste,or the people of the Tagus dont like this....
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...the people of the Tagus dont like this. As a food item there should be taste varie...
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...ke this. As a food item there should be taste variety among people. So without doing ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, so, therefore, well, for example, in addition, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2327.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 468.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97222222222 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75429302004 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467948717949 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 725.4 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.3996112429 57.8364921388 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.473684211 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6315789474 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05263157895 5.70786347227 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 36.0 5.25449101796 685% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389432444061 0.218282227539 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136124696581 0.0743258471296 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701367603751 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23018995875 0.128457276422 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621654330908 0.0628817314937 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 12.3882235529 238% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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