An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The topic emphasizes on the idea that new breed of millet high should be adopted to reduce the deficiency of vitamin A and the government of Tagus should do everything the could to promote this new breed. This argument is rife with holes and rests on some unsubstantiated assumptions and is unpersuasive as it stands.
The first statement is vague itself as it states that there is a deficiency of vitamin A among the people in the nation of Tagus without any survey or reports. It can be a situation where two or three families might have complained about the deficiency of vitamin A.To engineer a new breed of a product takes into account plethora of steps from research to production.Without proper survey if the organization develops new breed it will lead to lots of loss.
The new breed of millet seeds are costly and hence more budget will be incorporated for developing millet.As mentioned in the above paragraph if without proper reports more and more millet is grown by the farmer and in the end it turns out that only tow or three families were facing deficiency then there will be lots of economic loss to the farmers and ultimately to the government of Tagus.
It is said that millet is already a staple food in Tagus and people will readily adopt to the new breed. It is spurious as all the people have taste buds and there is a possibility that the new breed hampers the taste of the product which could decline the sale of millet. To ensure it will be adopted happily by the residents it should be made sure that new breed doens't hamper the taste of the product.
To promote a product on global scale lots of campaigning and advertisements are required. The promotion of the product will incorporate copious of budget. Before sparing so much money proper survey should be undertaken regarding how many people are facing such problems. Without detailed research spending lots of money will hamper the economy of the country.
The above argument is vague as it is not bolstered with enough statistic reports and documents.To develop a new breed of a product and promote it at national level requires large amount of finance so proper research needs to be undergone before moving to the execution phase.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 392 350
No. of Characters: 1808 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.45 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.612 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.564 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 52 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.154 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.284 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.385 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.367 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.687 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.088 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...argument is rife with holes and rests on some unsubstantiated assumptions and is ...
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...ained about the deficiency of vitamin A.To engineer a new breed of a product takes...
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Suggestion: Without
...ra of steps from research to production.Without proper survey if the organization devel...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...l be incorporated for developing millet.As mentioned in the above paragraph if wit...
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Line 7, column 82, Rule ID: ADOPT_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'adapt to'?
Suggestion: adapt to
...e food in Tagus and people will readily adopt to the new breed. It is spurious as all th...
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Line 9, column 156, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...uct will incorporate copious of budget. Before sparing so much money proper survey sho...
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Suggestion: To
... enough statistic reports and documents.To develop a new breed of a product and pr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, regarding, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 387.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76744186047 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67862331591 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467700258398 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.0900990836 57.8364921388 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.923076923 119.503703932 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.7692307692 23.324526521 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.84615384615 5.70786347227 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.422049719287 0.218282227539 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139042287186 0.0743258471296 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111248599882 0.0701772020484 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213836551183 0.128457276422 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105547251972 0.0628817314937 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.98 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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