The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disa

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compellingreasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

The above issue emphasizes on the idea that best way to train young generation of a nation for leadership in government , industry or any other fiels is by instilling a sense of cooperation and not competition. On one hand some might claim that competition will allow individuals to improve themselves day by day but some correctly argue that sense of cooperation will produce better results. Not only teamwork allows members to produce desired result for an industry but also there will be a sense of maturity in the members that for progress of an industry they need to improve each others work.

Although some might claim that competition amongst individuals in society will keep individuals motivated to come up with something new but this aspect conveniently overlooks the obvious risks. If there is always a sense of competition amongst individuals then they will not be willing to share their ideas with others which won't lead to overall development of an industry.There will also be a sense of jealousy amongst people which will deteriorate the working culture.

Firstly, teamwork always leads to desired results as the same idea is looked upon by different individuals having different mindsets. This process will allow to discard almost all the flaws present in the idea and also ameliorate the idea by the inputs of different people.Consider the example of Sachin Bansal and Binny Bansal, the founders of Flipkart. Sachin Bansal came up with the idea of developing some gadget to detect lane changing of cars, but when he met with Binny Bansal they both discussed the idea of e-commerce future in India and ended up launching Flipkart.Currently Flipkart is one of the e-commerce giants in India. The sense of cooperation can improve ones idea and lead to a project which is helpful for the society and hence for the overall nation.

Secondly, sense of cooperation always allows individuals to think for the betterment of the overall society whereas sense of competitiveness doesn't. Consider the example of democratic nation India, recently in 2019 they passed a bill to abrogate article 370 and article 35A from the state of Jammu And Kashmir. To make sure the bill passes in Lok Sabha it is important that majority of the people bolster this bill. As per the situation many dissidents keeping competition aside cooperated with the ruling party to ensure the bill passes and people live a salubrious life in Jammu and Kashmir. These results will have a good impact on the young generation of India that cooperation can lead to better results than competition.

Therefore as the issue suggests it is necessary to have a sense of cooperation between young people to be efficacious.The sense of competition will allow individual growth but for the overall development of the society sense of competition won't work efficiently.Therefore, it is fundamental to instill sense of cooperation in young generation to put forward the society at international level.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2493.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 486.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12962962963 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99990231842 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454732510288 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 795.6 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 23.0359550562 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.8664192946 60.3974514979 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.2 118.986275619 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.4 23.4991977007 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46666666667 5.21951772744 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178833756679 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0697709829446 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746145699241 0.0758088955206 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111559688141 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410046936364 0.0667264976115 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 14.1392134831 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 48.8420337079 80% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.8971910112 164% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.2143820225 132% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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