An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
International development organization, in order to combat deficiency of vitamin A, has put forth a recommendation of replacing the millet which is a staple in the people of Tagus, with a new breed of millet which it has engineered. For promoting this recommendation, the organization, has offered to pay subsidies to farmers who harvest this new breed for compensating the high price of seeds of this new breed of millet. As it can be derived, the recommendation by the organization stands weak as it is based on shaky reasons and has no strong support.
First, the new breed which has been engineered by the international development organization, has it passed all the safety tests. Also, even if it allegedly has high amounts of vitamin A, does it contains good amounts of other essential nutrients which a currently old millet would have. Furthermore, as it claims the new breed has high levels of vitamin A, will it effectively resolve deficiency problems in the people. And, also considering the possibility, that the high levels are not dangerous for the people. If on the intake of this millet, there will be a stark increase in levels of vitamin A, it can cause side effects related to toxicity due to extra amounts of vitamin A.
Secondly, the organization has asked the farmers to cultivate the seeds of this breed in exchange of subsidies for compensating the high price of the seeds. Are these subsidies enough compensation for extra charges which the farmers will have to bear. Also, will the farmers unfeignedly harness only the new breed of millet? They might also try to mix old and new seeds to falsely garner some extra profits.
Lastly, considering the adoption of the new millet by people of Tagus, there might probably arise situations of people shunning the new variety of millet as they might not develop a liking for it. This might be due to people being familiarized with the taste of old millet. We should also consider the costs of new millets. If there were to be high, most people will not adopt the variety.
In conclusion, due to the lack of some steps, the argument stands weak. There should be more steps taken to ensure that the new breed is safe and it is properly harvested till being adopted by people.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 387 350
No. of Characters: 1811 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.435 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.68 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.739 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 52 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.539 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.577 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 197, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'contain'?
Suggestion: contain
... has high amounts of vitamin A, does it contains good amounts of other essential nutrien...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 197, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'contain'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: contain
... has high amounts of vitamin A, does it contains good amounts of other essential nutrien...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1867.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 387.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82428940568 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81090872497 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441860465116 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 580.5 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4512966467 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.722222222 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05555555556 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.518951522645 0.218282227539 238% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159395383899 0.0743258471296 214% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0950520833315 0.0701772020484 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.284731689952 0.128457276422 222% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105047369163 0.0628817314937 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 12.3882235529 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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